You have seen an advertisement for a 'weekend work' in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. Now you want to apply for the job. Write a letter to the hotel manager expressing your interest. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain why you think you would be suitable for the job - ask what work you would be expected to do
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my interest in a part-time weekend work position at your hotel, which was advertised in one of the local newspapers in our town a couple of days ago. To introduce myself a little, I am a 21 years old university student, and I am currently studying in my final year at City University. My major is "Hotel and Tourism Management" and I am looking for a part-time job in a hotel to gain some hands-on knowledge. Since I live in the same town, I have had the opportunity to see your hotel. I also know how your hotel business contributes to the local economy of our town. Anyway, I think that I would be able to offer a great service to your hotel since I have already worked at a hotel in the past as a part-time Front Desk Officer. Besides, I have also worked as a part-time waiter at one of the busiest restaurants in our town. Moreover, I am energetic, and I have good communication skills. Finally, I am willing to start as soon as you ask me, only if you choose to hire me and tell me exactly what my roles and responsibilities should be at your hotel. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Chuck Moore
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Separate greeting Original: Dear Sir or Madam, I am Suggested revision: Dear Sir or Madam, I am Why it matters: The formal salutation should be separated from the opening sentence.
- 2. Article use Original: part-time weekend work position Suggested revision: part-time weekend position Why it matters: Work is unnecessary before position.
- 3. Concise source Original: one of the local newspapers Suggested revision: a local newspaper Why it matters: This is simpler and more natural.
- 4. Formal timing Original: in our town a couple of days ago Suggested revision: in the town a few days ago Why it matters: Our town sounds slightly informal in an application.
- 5. Formal transition Original: To introduce myself a little Suggested revision: By way of introduction Why it matters: This is more suitable for a job application.
- 6. Hyphenated adjective Original: 21 years old university student Suggested revision: 21-year-old university student Why it matters: Compound age adjectives need hyphens and singular year.
- 7. Course title Original: "Hotel and Tourism Management" Suggested revision: Hotel and Tourism Management Why it matters: Quotation marks are unnecessary around the major.
- 8. Job collocation Original: gain some hands-on knowledge Suggested revision: gain practical experience Why it matters: This is more natural for job motivation.
- 9. Relevant link Original: Since I live in the same town Suggested revision: As I live in the town Why it matters: This links location to knowledge of the hotel more formally.
- 10. Concise phrase Original: how your hotel business contributes Suggested revision: how your hotel contributes Why it matters: Business is unnecessary here.
- 11. Remove filler Original: Anyway, I think Suggested revision: Delete Why it matters: Anyway is too casual for a job application.
- 12. Natural collocation Original: offer a great service Suggested revision: provide excellent service Why it matters: This is a stronger service-industry collocation.
Suggested Rewrites
- Dear Sir or Madam, I am Dear Sir or Madam, I am
- part-time weekend work position part-time weekend position
- one of the local newspapers a local newspaper
- in our town a couple of days ago in the town a few days ago
- To introduce myself a little By way of introduction
- 21 years old university student 21-year-old university student
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter introduces the applicant, explains relevant experience, and asks about duties. The application purpose is clear.
End with a more direct question about duties and hours for the weekend role.
Coherence and Cohesion
The order is logical, but one long paragraph weakens formal letter organisation.
Use separate paragraphs for introduction, suitability, and job-duty questions.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is suitable and varied, with some wordy or slightly casual expressions.
Use concise job-application phrases and avoid casual connectors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is generally accurate, with occasional article, number, and punctuation issues.
Check age expressions, article use before job nouns, and closing punctuation.