You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: - introduce yourself - describe your plans for the party - invite your neighbour to come
Sample Response
Dear Ms Meena, I am Priya and I have recently moved with my family into the house next to yours. I am a doctor and I live with my daughter, and husband, who is a lawyer. I have planned to throw a party and invite some guests on the 10th of June and I would really appreciate your presence at that party. Since this is the first time our family is moving into a house that we own, we have planned to throw a party and invite some friends, colleagues, relatives and neighbours. We have arranged a dinner party and want to share this special moment with the people we care about and love. I have also planned to arrange a music show which would make the event more enjoyable. I hope you would not mind the concert! I would feel very delighted if you could join the party. My apology for any inconvenience it might cause to you, but I assure you that I have already made arrangements to make it less noisy by a plan to conduct games for children and keep them engaged. We will also place soundproof coverage at the entrance of my house. Hope you will accept my invitation and join the party. Yours sincerely, Priya Roy
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Title punctuation Original: Dear Ms Meena Suggested revision: Dear Ms Meena, Why it matters: Use a comma after the greeting.
- 2. List punctuation Original: with my daughter, and husband Suggested revision: with my daughter and husband Why it matters: The comma is unnecessary in this two-item list.
- 3. Natural phrase Original: I have planned to throw a party Suggested revision: I am planning to hold a party Why it matters: This is a more natural formal phrase.
- 4. Formal date style Original: on the 10th of June Suggested revision: on 10 June Why it matters: This is a cleaner formal date style.
- 5. Avoid repetition Original: at that party Suggested revision: there Why it matters: This reduces repetition of "party".
- 6. Tense accuracy Original: our family is moving Suggested revision: our family has moved Why it matters: The move has already happened.
- 7. Natural wording Original: We have arranged a dinner party Suggested revision: We are arranging a dinner party Why it matters: This better describes a future planned event.
- 8. Event vocabulary Original: arrange a music show Suggested revision: arrange live music Why it matters: This is a more natural phrase.
- 9. Future form Original: would make the event more enjoyable Suggested revision: will make the event more enjoyable Why it matters: Use "will" for a planned future result.
- 10. Fixed phrase Original: My apology Suggested revision: My apologies Why it matters: Use the plural fixed expression.
- 11. Awkward phrase Original: less noisy by a plan to conduct games Suggested revision: less noisy by organising games Why it matters: This is more natural and grammatical.
- 12. Natural noun Original: soundproof coverage Suggested revision: soundproofing Why it matters: This is the standard noun for reducing noise.
Suggested Rewrites
- Dear Ms Meena Dear Ms Meena,
- with my daughter, and husband with my daughter and husband
- I have planned to throw a party I am planning to hold a party
- on the 10th of June on 10 June
- at that party there
- our family is moving our family has moved
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter introduces the writer, describes the party, invites the neighbour, and acknowledges possible noise. The main task is covered, but the noise-control plan is not very convincing or clearly connected to a party with music.
Add concrete measures such as ending the party by a set time, keeping windows closed, and lowering music after a certain hour.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is understandable and generally ordered, but ideas are repetitive and the whole letter is in one block. Several sentences repeat "party" and "invite" unnecessarily.
Use paragraphing and combine repeated details so each paragraph has a distinct purpose.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for an invitation, with some useful phrases such as "special moment" and "token". Some choices are awkward, including "music show", "soundproof coverage", and "less noisy by a plan".
Use natural event vocabulary such as "live music", "keep the volume low", and "soundproofing".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is mostly clear, but there are errors in punctuation, tense, article use, and sentence construction. Several long sentences would benefit from simplification.
Check comma placement in noun lists and rewrite long sentences with one main idea each.