Maps show changes in art gallery
Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Essay Correction
Student Essay
The maps show art gallery before and after it has been developed. Overall, most transformations have taken place on the western part of the art exhibition, where a number of new facilities have been built, while the eastern part has been left completely unchanged. Additionally, the gallery becomes children-friendly and disabled people with wheelchair can visit without difficulties after the changes.
Prior to developments, the art gallery had a relatively simple layout compared to its current look. Back in 2005, there used to be a café in the north-western corner, to the south of which was gallery office. South-west was where an exhibition room 4 was located to the right of the entrance and on the left there were three exhibition rooms located consecutively. Just above the entrance, there was an entrance hall stood adjacent to the receptionist.
Following construction, the art gallery has undergone the arrival of several new amenities making it accessible for almost everyone. One of the significant changes is the introduction of the gallery shop instead of the café and the building has relatively shrunk in size. Just below the shop, the old gallery office has been removed, making way for the installment of a vending machine where visitors can buy some snacks and drinks. Exhibition room 4 in the south-west has been replaced by a temporary exhibition and children’s playground. Furthermore, beside the entrance and just under the children’s area there can be found a ramp for wheelchair users. Finally, elevator has been available for art visitors next to the stairs in the north, while the exhibition rooms in the west have remained unchanged.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Vocabulary choice child-friendly
- 2. Grammar/Article wheelchair users
- 3. Directional error to the left of the entrance and on the right there were three exhibition rooms
- 4. Double verb error there was an entrance hall standing adjacent
- 5. Inaccurate detail the shop is relatively smaller than the original café
- 6. Word choice installation
- 7. Inaccurate label children's area
- 8. Missing article Finally, a lift has been installed
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The response includes a clear overview and covers most of the main changes. However, it contains significant directional errors that confuse the layout of the gallery.
Double-check compass directions (North, South, East, West) and relative positions (left/right) against the visual prompt before writing to avoid describing the map backwards.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is organized logically into paragraphs (introduction/overview, 2005 layout, and present-day layout). Cohesive devices are used, though some transitions are slightly repetitive.
Use more varied spatial transition words (e.g., 'Opposite this', 'In the adjacent space', 'Parallel to') to improve the flow of geographical descriptions.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some good attempts at describing changes (e.g., 'undergone the arrival of', 'making way for'). However, there are some awkward word choices and minor errors.
Focus on learning precise collocations for map tasks, such as 'installation of facilities' and 'demolished/replaced by'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The candidate uses a mix of simple and complex structures. Passive voice is used appropriately for changes, but there are several grammatical slips and awkward constructions.
Review relative clauses and participle clauses to avoid double-verb errors like 'there was... stood'.