You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. Write a letter of invitation to the MP's secretary, Mrs Shelton. In your letter, introduce your committee say why you are having the meeting invite the MP to attend
Sample Response
Dear Mrs Shelton, I am an organising member of the non-profit organisation 'Our Green Planet', writing on behalf of our foundation and community members to invite the honourable MP, Mr Alex Cooper, to attend a conference about green areas on 21st December 2021 at Grand Replicon Hall. I am hoping that you would inform the honourable MP regarding the meeting and schedule his time for the same. We are proud to have a delegate who represents us in the parliament and is an advocate of the green movement. As a founding member of the 'Our Green Planet', I deem him the best person to have a discussion with the local citizens in this regard. 'Our Green Planet' has started its journey in 2016 and working to increase awareness about the green movement. Our organization has been highlighted in numerous national and international events and publications. 21 st December will be our 8th anniversary of this wonderful journey and we would like to make it special by focusing on our goal, spreading awareness among people about how individual steps can make our planet a better place to live in. We would be highly motivated if the honourable MP can spare some of his precious time and attend the meeting to discuss his views on that. We are expecting him to stay for an hour. It would be so kind of you if you could inform our respected MP about the invitation and explain to him how important it is for us to have him. Thanks in advance. Yours faithfully, Laura Matthew
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Natural noun phrase I am a member of the organising committee
- 2. Missing verb and am writing on behalf
- 3. Unnatural phrase check his availability
- 4. Article use in Parliament
- 5. Tense error started its work in 2016
- 6. Missing verb and has been working to increase
- 7. Date format 21st December
- 8. Formal tone spare an hour of his time
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter introduces the committee, explains the meeting, and invites the MP through the secretary. The purpose is clear, although the event details sometimes become wordy and the exact discussion focus could be sharper.
State the invitation details early, then briefly explain why the MP's contribution is needed for local green areas.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a logical flow, but it is one long paragraph and some ideas repeat the importance of the MP. Cohesion is adequate but not always efficient.
Use clear paragraphs for introduction, meeting purpose, invitation details, and closing request.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is suitably formal and topic-specific, with some less natural collocations such as schedule his time and precious time.
Use formal but direct invitation language, such as check his availability and attend as a guest speaker.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most sentences are understandable, but tense and clause-control errors occur in longer sentences.
Simplify long sentences and check verb tense when describing the organisation's history.