Some people believe that children should start learning a foreign language at primary school, while others think it is better to start at secondary school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
In my opinionIn my subjective opinion the best way of introducing a languageintroduction language in children'sKids`s lives is to start learning itit's start to learn it at primary school. In this situation they will get early exposure to a language and it can improveit's can impove their perception of the worldperception this world. This essay will analyze the reasons for this view.Let's to analys why prefer this position. On the one hand, they will be more advancedthey will more advanced, if they start at an early ageif will start in that age, especiallyesspecially in that factor they have another type of thinking. Also, for them it will be more interesting than for adultsinstead for the adults. Another important point is thatThe no less important moment it that they will havegot a simple way getting fluency,because they will acquire a language. On the other hand, Kids' parents can be disappointeddisappontning about hard workload for their children. The primary school it's a crisis period for this age, they already learn a lot of thingshings like drawing, numbers, logical momets and other examplesexaplems, so it can be hard to them. In conclusionconclution, we have the differents situations about necessityneccesity of learning English or another language for little kids. Like I said before, I`m follow my position about including languages like important part of program and growing. It's can be some hard, but when they will take it like game then hard work.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay addresses both parts of the prompt (starting in primary vs. secondary school) and expresses a personal opinion. However, the ideas are extremely underdeveloped, and the essay is significantly under-length at only 205 words (well below the 250-word minimum). This severely limits the score.
To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and specific examples. Aim to write at least 260-280 words to fully develop your points and avoid penalties for length.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a basic paragraph structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, cohesive devices are sometimes used inaccurately or too informally (e.g., 'Let's to analys', 'The no less important moment').
Use more formal academic transition signals (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'In addition', 'On the other hand') and ensure your paragraphs flow logically from one idea to the next.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is limited and contains frequent spelling and word-form errors (e.g., 'esspecially', 'disappontning', 'hings', 'exaplems', 'conclution', 'neccesity'). These errors occasionally obscure meaning.
Focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words. Try to use a wider range of vocabulary related to education, such as 'cognitive development', 'curriculum', and 'linguistic skills'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is a major weak point. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, sentence structure, modal verbs ('it's can impove'), and prepositions. Many sentences are fragmented or translated literally from another language.
Review basic sentence structures, particularly the use of modal verbs (can/will + base verb) and conditional clauses ('if they start' instead of 'if will start').
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that children should start learning a foreign language at primary school, while others think it is better to start at secondary school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Your response
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