Nowadays TV has become an essential part of life. Medium to spread news & awareness and for some, it acts like a companion. What is your opinion about this?
Sample Response
The invention of Television around two decades back opened wide frontiers for transmission of visual communication and awareness. Since then the research and development on this have never paused, and today we have 3D and curved televisions available as well. In fact, it will be hard to find any domestic family without watching TV as a part of their daily life. It has helped in making the world a smaller place to live in by making all sorts of shows, latest news update and information in all areas via a wide range of channels.
Television provides a wide range to channels to choose from on tourism, travel, foods, lifestyle, news, general knowledge, movies, music, reality show and many more. In fact, the information is so useful that many people plan their holiday based on a show on tourism, they try to cook new items by following the recipe shown, become aware of all sorts of happenings in the world and least to mention the craze about the sports event.
For many, TV is almost indispensable as they believe it to be a friend which is always there when needed. Nowadays, TV is available with video games, quizzes, and other interactive functions. It can be a good way to spend time with it, which is often necessary when alone.
Television has influenced our lives so much that people watching daily soaps especially have a hangover of the show throughout the day. But, it is our duty to limit anything in too excess. The benefits which TV has brought into our daily lives cannot be denied.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use lowercase noun Original: Television Suggested revision: television Why it matters: Capitalisation is unnecessary unless it starts a sentence or is part of a name.
- 2. Correct factual phrasing Original: around two decades back Suggested revision: many decades ago Why it matters: Television was invented much earlier than two decades ago, and “back” is informal.
- 3. Use natural phrase Original: opened wide frontiers Suggested revision: opened new possibilities Why it matters: The phrase is awkward and overly dramatic.
- 4. Clarify meaning Original: transmission of visual communication Suggested revision: broadcasting visual information Why it matters: This is more precise for television.
- 5. Improve agreement Original: the research and development on this have never paused Suggested revision: research and development in this field has never paused Why it matters: The subject phrase is singular as a field of work.
- 6. Use natural phrase Original: domestic family Suggested revision: household Why it matters: “Domestic family” is not a normal collocation.
- 7. Clarify meaning Original: without watching TV Suggested revision: that does not watch TV Why it matters: The current phrase suggests finding a family while they are not watching TV.
- 8. Use plural phrase Original: latest news update Suggested revision: latest news updates Why it matters: The list refers to many updates.
- 9. Clarify scope Original: in all areas Suggested revision: in many areas Why it matters: “All” is too absolute for this claim.
- 10. Fix preposition Original: wide range to channels Suggested revision: wide range of channels Why it matters: The correct phrase is “range of.”
- 11. Use category noun Original: foods Suggested revision: food Why it matters: As a TV category, “food” is more natural.
- 12. Use plural category Original: reality show Suggested revision: reality shows Why it matters: The list names programme categories generally.
Suggested Rewrites
- Television television
- around two decades back many decades ago
- opened wide frontiers opened new possibilities
- transmission of visual communication broadcasting visual information
- the research and development on this have never paused research and development in this field has never paused
- domestic family household
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
The essay gives a generally positive opinion about television and addresses its roles in spreading information and providing companionship. The position is understandable, but it is not stated as directly as it could be and some points are descriptive rather than evaluative.
State your opinion clearly in the introduction, then evaluate both benefits and limits of TV rather than only listing uses.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has clear paragraphs and a logical movement from information to companionship to a balanced final note. Some examples are listed heavily, and the conclusion is brief.
End each body paragraph with a sentence explaining why the listed examples support your opinion.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonable range of vocabulary related to television, channels, awareness, and interactive functions. A few collocations are unnatural or imprecise.
Use standard collocations such as "source of information", "range of channels", and "excessive use".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most grammar is accurate enough for clear communication, but there are errors with prepositions, articles, and sentence construction. Some sentences are too list-like.
Review prepositions after nouns such as "range of" and avoid compressed lists that create grammar problems.