You are going to organise a family party next week at your home. You want to invite a friend to this party. Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to attend the party. In your letter: - explain why you are organising the party - describe what you are planning to do - say why you want your friend to come to the party
Sample Response
Dear Carl,
Hope all is well at your end with you and your family. I know that you don’t really like to attend any kind of party, but I still took the liberty to invite you to one since it's going to involve mostly the family members of my extended family. After all, I'm well aware of the fact that you don’t really feel comfortable being around strangers.
Oh, in case you are wondering, my family has decided to organize this party in order to congratulate my youngest uncle who recently has received his license to practice medicine after struggling for almost two years! This party is going to be more like a casual party, it won’t include too many things except enjoying some freshly-made dinner, and light music, which were especially enjoyed by my uncle when he still was a student.
The party is going to be held on 23rd August, this month, and I'd very much like you to join it since this is going to allow you an opportunity to recuperate from the boredom of some tough engineering lessons and mid-term examinations.
Warm regards,
Mario
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural verb pattern Original: don’t really like to attend Suggested revision: don’t really enjoy attending Why it matters: 'Enjoy attending' is a more natural pattern for describing a general preference.
- 2. Fix liberty pattern Original: took the liberty to invite Suggested revision: have taken the liberty of inviting Why it matters: The standard pattern is 'take the liberty of' followed by an -ing form.
- 3. Streamline reason clause Original: since it's going to involve mostly Suggested revision: as it will mostly involve Why it matters: This alternative states the reason more concisely and keeps the future reference clear.
- 4. Remove family repetition Original: the family members of my extended family Suggested revision: members of my extended family Why it matters: Repeating 'family' makes the phrase unnecessarily redundant.
- 5. Use concise wording Original: well aware of the fact that Suggested revision: aware that Why it matters: The shorter expression retains the meaning without wordiness.
- 6. Choose social context Original: being around strangers Suggested revision: socialising with strangers Why it matters: This verb describes the relevant party situation more precisely.
- 7. Smooth informal opening Original: Oh, in case you are wondering, Suggested revision: In case you are wondering, Why it matters: Removing the interjection keeps the friendly tone while making the transition smoother.
- 8. Use British spelling Original: organize Suggested revision: organise Why it matters: British spelling is preferable for consistency in an IELTS response.
- 9. Place adverb naturally Original: recently has received Suggested revision: has recently received Why it matters: A frequency or time adverb normally follows the auxiliary in the present perfect.
- 10. Use British forms Original: license to practice medicine Suggested revision: licence to practise medicine Why it matters: British English distinguishes the noun 'licence' from the verb 'practise'.
- 11. Avoid party repetition Original: more like a casual party Suggested revision: a casual gathering Why it matters: This removes the repeated word 'party' and states the format directly.
- 12. Remove unnecessary hyphen Original: freshly-made dinner Suggested revision: freshly made dinner Why it matters: An adverb ending in '-ly' is not normally hyphenated before an adjective.
Suggested Rewrites
- don’t really like to attend don’t really enjoy attending
- took the liberty to invite have taken the liberty of inviting
- since it's going to involve mostly as it will mostly involve
- the family members of my extended family members of my extended family
- well aware of the fact that aware that
- being around strangers socialising with strangers
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter has a warm, convincing voice and covers the reason for the celebration, the planned activities, and the personal benefit of attending. Its main limitation is that several long sentences contain awkward links, repetition, or unclear reference, which weakens control despite a clear message. The highest priority is to divide comma-spliced sentences and refine phrasing so the invitation remains natural and precise.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
All three bullet points are clearly addressed with relevant detail, and the friendly tone suits an invitation to a close friend.
Make the practical plan slightly more concrete by giving a start time or another useful attendance detail.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical sequence and uses clear paragraphing, but some long sentences join ideas too loosely.
Split the comma-spliced sentences so each reason, activity, and invitation point has a cleaner progression.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and expressive enough for the informal purpose, though several phrases are awkward or repetitive.
Use more natural wording for expressions such as join it and family members of my extended family.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The letter attempts a varied range of complex sentences, but recurring comma splices, agreement problems, and unclear relative clauses reduce accuracy.
Use full stops or conjunctions between independent clauses and check agreement in phrases such as music, which was enjoyed.
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