You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. In your letter say: - what the content of the music concert is - where and when the music concert is - why you think your friend should go to this concert
Sample Response
Dear Taylor, It has been a while since I have talked to you or met you in person. So, I hope that everything is well with you. Anyway, I'm writing to request you to accompany me to a musical concert which will be held on July 25. With regard to the concert and its content, it will be an open-air music concert which will take place at the National Football Stadium in my hometown in Montreal. I am asking you to go with me because I believe you will love the concert. A couple of your favourites and a few other top-class country singers are going to play some of their most popular music at the concert. Besides, some techno music will be played there, and I know how much you like it. Besides, I don’t think that I would really be able to enjoy the concert all by myself. So, let me know what you think about the idea. But, if you are really interested to accompany me to the concert, just let me know within a few days so that I can purchase the tickets for both of us in advance. Warm wishes, Julian Gonzalez
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Letter layout Original: Dear Taylor, It has Suggested revision: Dear Taylor, It has Why it matters: Begin the body on a new line.
- 2. Natural tense Original: since I have talked to you or met you Suggested revision: since we last spoke or met Why it matters: This is the idiomatic past-time construction.
- 3. Remove weak linker Original: So, I hope Suggested revision: I hope Why it matters: So does not express a useful logical relationship here.
- 4. Overformal invitation Original: request you to accompany me Suggested revision: invite you to come with me Why it matters: This is more natural between friends.
- 5. Redundant wording Original: musical concert Suggested revision: concert Why it matters: A concert is already a musical event.
- 6. Heavy transition Original: With regard to the concert and its content Suggested revision: It's an open-air concert Why it matters: A direct opening suits an informal letter.
- 7. Streamline location Original: in my hometown in Montreal Suggested revision: in Montreal Why it matters: The location is already clear to a friend.
- 8. Clarify reference Original: your favourites Suggested revision: your favourite singers Why it matters: Name the people being referred to.
- 9. Concert collocation Original: play some of their most popular music Suggested revision: perform some of their biggest hits Why it matters: Artists perform songs at a concert.
- 10. Vary linking Original: Besides, some techno music Suggested revision: There will also be some techno music Why it matters: Avoid repeating Besides.
- 11. Personal reason link Original: Besides, I don’t think Suggested revision: Most importantly, I don't think Why it matters: This signals the personal motivation more clearly.
- 12. Concise wording Original: all by myself Suggested revision: on my own Why it matters: This is natural and concise.
Suggested Rewrites
- Dear Taylor, It has Dear Taylor, It has
- since I have talked to you or met you since we last spoke or met
- So, I hope I hope
- request you to accompany me invite you to come with me
- musical concert concert
- With regard to the concert and its content It's an open-air concert
Why this response received Band 7.0
The invitation covers the concert's content, venue, date, and several convincing personal reasons in a warm, appropriate tone. The main limitation is presentation as one dense block, alongside repetitive linking and a few unnatural invitation phrases; prioritise friendly paragraphing, a more direct invitation, and cleaner verb patterns.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
All bullet points are fully addressed with relevant details and a clear request for a reply.
Make the invitation more direct and add one practical detail such as the start time or travel plan.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically, but one-block formatting and repeated 'Besides' weaken cohesion.
Use separate paragraphs for the invitation, event details, reasons and reply arrangements.
Lexical Resource
There is good topic vocabulary and an appropriately friendly register, with a few awkward collocations.
Use natural invitation phrases such as 'I'd love you to come with me' and 'interested in coming'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most sentences are accurate and varied, though a few preposition and punctuation choices need correction.
Review verb-preposition patterns and remove unnecessary commas after coordinating conjunctions.