Write a letter to a friend telling him/her about an interesting website that you have found recently. In your letter: - say how you found it - how it can help - how you use it
Sample Response
Dear Victor,
Hope all is well at your end. I just quickly wanted to share some interesting information – information about a website that is – with you.
I know that you're very much interested in growing mushrooms in your backyard. So, this particular website, called “growmushroom.net”, would probably come to your rescue since it covers just about all sorts of information about growing mushrooms. All you need to do is click on the “our works” page from the main menu, and it will take you to the information you would need.
However, while this particular website would be useful for just about anybody who is interested in growing mushrooms on a small scale, it would be particularly helpful for you since it talks a lot about how to successfully grow them in the areas where the weather is rather dry, and if I remember correctly, the weather is dry where you live. By the way, I came to learn about this “cool” looking website on the internet in the process of trying to find a cool theme for a “gardening” related website which I am supposed to develop for one of my clients. Though I do not use the website, I'm sure it would be helpful to you.
Warm wishes,
Mitchel
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Clarify interrupted phrase Original: some interesting information – information about a website that is – Suggested revision: an interesting website I recently found Why it matters: The repeated noun and misplaced dashes interrupt the sentence's meaning.
- 2. Hyphenate compound modifier Original: a “gardening” related website Suggested revision: a gardening-related website Why it matters: The compound adjective before the noun requires a hyphen, not quotation marks.
- 3. Acknowledge missing use Original: Though I do not use the website Suggested revision: Although I have not used the website myself Why it matters: This phrasing is clearer, but it also confirms that the required personal-use point still needs addressing.
- 4. Use natural greeting Original: Hope all is well at your end. Suggested revision: Hope all is well with you. Why it matters: This is a more natural informal greeting to a friend.
- 5. Remove redundant modifier Original: just quickly Suggested revision: quickly Why it matters: The two adverbs express the same idea, so one is sufficient.
- 6. Use precise benefit Original: come to your rescue Suggested revision: be especially useful to you Why it matters: The replacement states the website's benefit more directly.
- 7. Avoid vague wording Original: just about all sorts of information Suggested revision: a wide range of information Why it matters: This phrase is more concise and specific in tone.
- 8. Capitalise page title Original: the “our works” page Suggested revision: the “Our Works” page Why it matters: A named menu page should retain title-style capitalisation.
- 9. Explain personal use Suggested revision: State specifically how you use the website, as the prompt requires, rather than saying that you do not use it. Why it matters: The letter covers discovery and usefulness but does not fulfil the bullet point about personal use.
- 10. Improve information order Suggested revision: Explain how you found the site before describing how it helps and how you use it. Why it matters: Following the prompt's sequence would make the progression easier to follow.
Suggested Rewrites
- some interesting information – information about a website that is – an interesting website I recently found
- a “gardening” related website a gardening-related website
- Though I do not use the website Although I have not used the website myself
- Hope all is well at your end. Hope all is well with you.
- just quickly quickly
- come to your rescue be especially useful to you
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter has a clear, friendly purpose and gives relevant, personalised detail about why the website could help Victor. Its main weakness is that it explicitly says the writer does not use the site, so the third bullet point is not fulfilled, while a few expressions are overly elaborate or awkward. The response should explain a genuine way the writer uses the website and tighten some phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The purpose and first two bullet points are developed clearly, but the response does not explain how the writer uses the website.
Fulfil the third bullet point by describing a specific feature the writer has personally used and what it helped them do.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically through the website's content, usefulness, and discovery, although the long central paragraph could be better balanced.
Separate the discovery and usefulness details into distinct paragraphs so that each bullet point is easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of topic-specific and informal vocabulary, with occasional awkward or overworked expressions.
Replace elaborate phrases such as “come to your rescue” with simpler, more natural wording suited to a friendly recommendation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied mix of simple and complex sentences is generally well controlled, with only minor awkwardness and punctuation issues.
Refine the longest sentences by reducing unnecessary clauses and checking punctuation around inserted details.