Write a letter to a friend telling him/her about an interesting website that you have found recently. In your letter: - say how you found it - how it can help - how you use it
Sample Response
Dear Spencer,
Hope you're doing fine. Today I'm writing to tell you about a fascinating website that I've found recently and have been using ever since!
The URL of this website is fooddecider.net, and it's basically a website that helps users decide on a menu or a food item. A week or so ago, I looked at Google to choose between two menus and this website popped up in the Google search result. Now I feel lucky that I have found it. Since I know how much you love to eat healthy food and often get confused about what to eat for lunch or dinner. I believe it can help you immensely. Moreover, it is fun and informative at the same time.
Whenever you enter the name of a menu or food item in its user-friendly interface, it will explain the food values of that item or menu and let you know how many calories you are going to consume. It will also advise you on what menus to avoid and at what time of the day. Moreover, if you are undecided between two sets of menus or items, it will pick one for you based on the nutritious values. And that is exactly how I use it. I simply enter a food name or input two menus, and it does the rest for me.
I hope you'd like it as much as I do. Hope to see you soon.
Yours truly,
Ivan
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Natural word order Original: Today I'm writing Suggested revision: I'm writing today Why it matters: This order sounds more natural when introducing the purpose of the letter.
- 2. Use precise nouns Original: a menu or a food item Suggested revision: a meal or food item Why it matters: A menu is a list of choices, whereas a meal is something the user might select to eat.
- 3. Correct search collocation Original: looked at Google Suggested revision: searched Google Why it matters: English normally uses 'search' rather than 'look at' for making an online query.
- 4. Clarify the options Original: to choose between two menus Suggested revision: to help me choose between two meals Why it matters: This wording clarifies that the choice concerns meals rather than lists of dishes.
- 5. Refine search wording Original: popped up in the Google search result Suggested revision: appeared in the search results Why it matters: The revision is more concise and uses the conventional plural phrase 'search results'.
- 6. Use natural plural Original: healthy food Suggested revision: healthy foods Why it matters: The plural fits the following discussion of choosing among different items.
- 7. Express indecision clearly Original: get confused about what to eat Suggested revision: struggle to decide what to eat Why it matters: The revision states the decision-making difficulty more precisely.
- 8. Correct nutrition term Original: food values Suggested revision: nutritional value Why it matters: 'Nutritional value' is the standard term for the nutrients and energy in food.
- 9. Name foods accurately Original: what menus to avoid Suggested revision: which foods to avoid Why it matters: The website advises about food choices, not about avoiding whole menus.
- 10. Use concise phrasing Original: at what time of the day Suggested revision: at which times of day Why it matters: This plural form fits advice that may apply at different points in the day.
- 11. Clarify compared choices Original: two sets of menus or items Suggested revision: two meals or food items Why it matters: The original phrase confuses menus with the individual options being compared.
- 12. Correct word form Original: nutritious values Suggested revision: nutritional value Why it matters: 'Nutritional' describes value, while 'nutritious' describes food that provides nourishment.
Suggested Rewrites
- Today I'm writing I'm writing today
- a menu or a food item a meal or food item
- looked at Google searched Google
- to choose between two menus to help me choose between two meals
- popped up in the Google search result appeared in the search results
- healthy food healthy foods
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter fully addresses its purpose and all three bullet points with a friendly tone, clear personal relevance, and useful detail about the website's features. Its main limitation is a cluster of awkward collocations and one sentence fragment, which occasionally makes otherwise fluent ideas sound less natural. The highest-priority improvement is to use more precise food-related wording and review sentence boundaries while preserving the strong development.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter clearly explains how the website was found, how it can help, and how the writer uses it, with relevant supporting detail.
Refine the recommendation by stating more precisely which foods or dishes the site's advice helps the writer choose.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from discovery and usefulness to the writer's own use, with clear paragraphing and generally effective linking.
Reduce the repeated use of Moreover and connect the friend's needs to the recommendation without using a sentence fragment.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and appropriate to the topic, although several food-related collocations are unnatural or imprecise.
Use natural phrases such as nutritional information, nutritional value, and dishes instead of food values, nutritious values, and sets of menus.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of simple and complex structures is mostly accurate, but a dependent clause is incorrectly presented as a complete sentence.
Attach the clause beginning Since I know to the following main clause and check sentence boundaries throughout.