Increasingly, the western world has been outsourcing its labour-related jobs to cheaper alternatives available in less-developed countries. Although this creates opportunities for people in poorer nations, it is a policy that is criticized by many in the west. Write an essay response supporting the case for outsourcing of labour related jobs.
Sample Response
Outsourcing is one of the latest trends followed by many countries around the world. Western nations namely, outsource their labour related jobs to developing countries. This has been criticised by many people across the globe. But I believe this is very beneficial for both the countries involved in this trade. It is because of the fact that it will provide an opportunity for the less developed nations and will also help the developed countries in its growth by decreasing its workload. Developing countries get benefits from the work they get from outside. It not only increases the per capita income of the nation but also brings foreign investment in the country which is one of the main sources for country's economic growth. For example, African countries like Kenya, Uganda can improve their financial growth if they get any work from developed nations like USA, UK etc. This is only possible when outsourcing is encouraged by strong powers of the world. Also, Developed countries will get benefits from this as well. These nations will be outsourcing their labour and talent related jobs to other countries and will get enough time and manpower for other important work. The USA, for instance, gives their low-level software work to companies in developing nations but uses its best resources in more promising tasks. Thus this process is beneficial for the people of the both of these countries outsourcing play an important role. Looking at the above points, we can come to a conclusion that outsourcing of jobs to underdeveloped countries is beneficial for both the nations in terms of finance and growth. So, this practice must be encouraged by all the countries around the world.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Set off interrupter Original: Western nations namely, Suggested revision: Western nations, in particular, Why it matters: The interrupting phrase needs commas on both sides.
- 2. Remove unnecessary article Original: both the countries involved Suggested revision: both countries involved Why it matters: The article is unnecessary after “both” in this phrase.
- 3. Use precise reference Original: trade Suggested revision: arrangement Why it matters: Outsourcing is more precisely described here as an arrangement.
- 4. Use natural collocation Original: Developing countries get benefits from Suggested revision: Developing countries benefit from Why it matters: “Benefit from” is the natural and concise verb phrase.
- 5. Clarify outsourced work Original: the work they get from outside Suggested revision: the work outsourced to them Why it matters: This wording identifies the source of the work more clearly.
- 6. Use concise possessive Original: the per capita income of the nation Suggested revision: the nation’s per capita income Why it matters: The possessive form makes the noun phrase more concise.
- 7. Correct preposition and article Original: sources for country's economic growth Suggested revision: sources of a country’s economic growth Why it matters: “Source of” is the correct collocation, and singular “country” needs an article.
- 8. Join two examples Original: Kenya, Uganda Suggested revision: Kenya and Uganda Why it matters: Two country examples should be joined with “and,” not only a comma.
- 9. Use economic term Original: their financial growth Suggested revision: their economies Why it matters: Countries improve their economies rather than their “financial growth.”
- 10. Specify outsourced work Original: any Suggested revision: outsourced Why it matters: “Outsourced work” states the intended type of work precisely.
- 11. Format country examples Original: USA, UK etc. Suggested revision: the USA and the UK Why it matters: These country names need articles and a clear conjunction.
- 12. Use natural expression Original: strong powers of the world Suggested revision: major world powers Why it matters: “Major world powers” is the established expression for influential countries.
Suggested Rewrites
- Western nations namely, Western nations, in particular,
- both the countries involved both countries involved
- trade arrangement
- Developing countries get benefits from Developing countries benefit from
- the work they get from outside the work outsourced to them
- the per capita income of the nation the nation’s per capita income
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear supportive position and organizes two relevant benefit strands for developing and developed countries, with examples that keep the argument easy to follow. Its main weakness is that several claims remain broad or speculative, while frequent awkward phrasing and grammatical slips reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop each benefit through a more specific cause-and-effect explanation and then proofread sentence structure and agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear supportive position is maintained, and two relevant benefits are explained with examples, though some claims remain broad or speculative.
Develop each benefit through a fuller cause-and-effect chain supported by a more concrete, credible example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from the position to benefits for each group, although some linking is mechanical and one concluding body sentence is poorly formed.
Use clearer topic-to-support connections and revise abrupt or overloaded sentences so each paragraph closes coherently.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for discussing economic growth and work allocation, but inaccurate collocations and repetitive wording reduce precision.
Replace vague combinations such as getting work or financial growth with more natural, context-specific expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the argument, but article, agreement, punctuation, and sentence-construction errors recur.
Proofread systematically for subject-verb agreement, articles, and complete clause structure, especially in longer sentences.
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Increasingly, the western world has been outsourcing its labour-related jobs to cheaper alternatives available in less-developed countries. Although this creates opportunities for people in poorer nations, it is a policy that is criticized by many in the west. Write an essay response supporting the case for outsourcing of labour related jobs.
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