In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry?
Sample Response
I am from Saint Petersburg, Russia, and I think that the question about whether landlands should be left in their natural condition or should be utilised to be developed for housing and industry is one that is open to debatethe one that is open for debate. Personally, I believe that it is a controversial question because both views have their advantages. However, in this situation, an intermediate position can be taken. In the following paragraphs, I will give my reasons supporting my positionreasons to support the answer. On the one handFrom the one side, saving land in its natural condition brings many benefits. First of all, many wild animals will thrive in our forests. Unfortunately, nowadays many wild animals are endangered because they do not have any place to live in and enough food to eat. SecondlySecond of all, our children will be able to learn about animals not only from books but also from observing them in their natural environment. In addition to those benefits, our air will be cleaner because many forests will remove pollutants from itclean it from pollution and improve its qualitymake it fresher. On the other handFrom the other side, clearing forestsdeforesting our land and building many new buildingsconstructions can have a few positive aspects. For example, constructing new industrial facilitiesbuilding new industrial buildings may have a positive impact on the country's economy. Many new companies will have the opportunity to produce more goods and as a resultas the result of this the country will receive more money from abroad and this will lead to the overall economic improvementimprovement of the economy on the whole. Considering all the points above,To conclude, all mentioned above, I think that we need to be more careful with the natural resources we useconsume and, moreover, we can do something to preserve them. For example, companies that produce lumber can also replenish timber resourcesresume the resources of wood by planting new trees there. This way we can preserve our land and save it from deforestationdefrosting. I must agree that it is difficult for Russia at this moment not to develop land for housing and industry because the country needs money and a stronger economy, but I believe that many new factories can replace the old ones without developing new land. So, my point is that we must expandextend the production of new goods but not at the expense of wild animals and their landthe wild animals and their land.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a thoughtful, ultimately clear compromise and supports both conservation and development with relevant reasons. Its main weakness is imprecise language, including several incorrect word choices that occasionally distract from otherwise clear ideas. The highest priority is to refine collocations and word choice while stating the comparative position more directly at the outset and developing the country's housing needs alongside industry.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both land-use options, develops relevant benefits, and reaches a clear qualified position, although housing needs receive little direct attention.
State the preferred balance more precisely in the introduction and develop the housing dimension as fully as the industrial one.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through clear thematic paragraphs, though some linking phrases are formulaic and the conclusion carries several distinct points.
Use more natural transitions and divide the concluding reasoning into a tighter sequence of claim, qualification, and solution.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for the topic, but inaccurate collocations and word choices such as references to constructions, resuming wood resources, and defrosting reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate topic-specific collocations, especially for land development, reforestation, conservation, and industrial expansion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, but article, preposition, and sentence-structure errors recur.
Edit complex sentences for cleaner clause control and check articles and prepositions in fixed expressions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry?
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