Environmental problems such as pollution and climate change affect all the people in the world. Although global decisions are made to reduce these problems, the solutions are not effective. Why are the solutions ineffective? How can these problems be solved?
Sample Response
It is undeniable that environmental issues such as global warming and pollution have negative impacts on all countries and these negative consequences would affect the whole world. Even though some global solutions have been addressed to solve these problems, many people believe that they were not effective and efficient. The following essay will discuss some of the reasons why the solutions were not successful and how these issues should be resolved.
For a number of reasons, solutions that have been implemented for resolving environmental issues were considered as ineffective. Firstly, solutions were only implemented by certain countries. For example, only a few countries in the world implement carbon monoxide test for vehicles such as Canada or Australia while it should have been done in all countries. Other countries such as India and China are allowing vehicles with all conditions to commute in their streets and roads. Secondly, some countries do not provide clear regulations and laws regarding to environmental issues. For instance, in several countries, there is no fine or penalty when people throw the garbage to the river or sea. As a consequence, oceans are still polluted with waste from these countries. Though many global policies have been taken, many of them are not implemented in many countries. This is the main reason we still have increasing world temperature and pollutions.
There are some solutions that the United Nations and governments could consider to resolve these environmental issues. One of the solutions is that it must be agreed and implemented by all countries. For example, Air Conditioners and Refrigerators must not use CFC gas which is dangerous for the ozone layers. These regulations must be implemented internationally, and for countries that still use CFC must be banned and given penalties. And then, each country should have strict regulations regarding to environmental issues and the United Nations should audit each of these countries on a timely manner. By having a review from an independent party, each country is forced to implement friendly environmental practices in their area.
In conclusions, I believe that global environmental issues could be resolved, as long as all countries participate in implementing the solutions.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural collocation Original: addressed to solve Suggested revision: proposed to address Why it matters: Solutions are proposed, while problems are addressed or solved.
- 2. Correct purpose structure Original: implemented for resolving Suggested revision: implemented to resolve Why it matters: Use the infinitive to express the purpose of implementing the solutions.
- 3. Remove unnecessary preposition Original: considered as ineffective Suggested revision: considered ineffective Why it matters: The verb 'consider' takes an object complement without 'as' here.
- 4. Use plural noun Original: test Suggested revision: tests Why it matters: A general reference to tests for multiple vehicles requires the plural form.
- 5. Clarify vehicle condition Original: vehicles with all conditions Suggested revision: vehicles regardless of their condition Why it matters: The replacement clearly expresses that vehicles in any condition are permitted.
- 6. Choose natural verb Original: commute in their streets and roads Suggested revision: travel on their streets and roads Why it matters: Vehicles travel on roads; people commute between places.
- 7. Correct preposition pattern Original: clear regulations and laws regarding to environmental issues Suggested revision: clear regulations and laws regarding environmental issues Why it matters: 'Regarding' is used directly before its object without 'to'.
- 8. Remove unnecessary article Original: throw the garbage Suggested revision: throw garbage Why it matters: 'Garbage' is normally uncountable and does not need 'the' in this general statement.
- 9. Correct direction preposition Original: to the river or sea Suggested revision: into rivers or the sea Why it matters: 'Into' expresses movement from outside to inside the water.
- 10. Use policy collocation Original: taken Suggested revision: adopted Why it matters: Policies are normally adopted or implemented, rather than taken.
- 11. Use natural expression Original: increasing world temperature Suggested revision: rising global temperatures Why it matters: 'Rising global temperatures' is the standard expression for this trend.
- 12. Use uncountable noun Original: pollutions Suggested revision: pollution Why it matters: 'Pollution' is uncountable when referring to environmental contamination generally.
Suggested Rewrites
- addressed to solve proposed to address
- implemented for resolving implemented to resolve
- considered as ineffective considered ineffective
- test tests
- vehicles with all conditions vehicles regardless of their condition
- commute in their streets and roads travel on their streets and roads
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response directly answers both questions, organizes its causes and solutions clearly, and supports them with relevant examples. Its main limitation is the frequent awkward or inaccurate language, especially collocations, articles, prepositions, and sentence structures, which sometimes weakens precision despite leaving the message clear. The highest priority is to express the existing ideas in more natural, grammatically controlled sentences and to refine a few overgeneralized examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the task are addressed with clear, relevant causes and workable international solutions that receive adequate explanation and examples.
Develop the practical operation of the proposed international enforcement measures more precisely and avoid overgeneralizing individual countries.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear four-part structure and a logical progression from reasons to solutions, with generally effective paragraphing and referencing.
Use a less mechanical range of links and tighten repetitive sentences so that the argument moves more smoothly within paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but frequent unnatural collocations and word-form choices reduce precision.
Prioritize accurate combinations such as environmental regulations, impose penalties, and environmentally friendly practices over ambitious but awkward phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the argument clearly, although recurring article, preposition, agreement, and passive-construction errors remain noticeable.
Proofread complex sentences for their grammatical subject and verb relationship, then correct articles, plurals, and fixed prepositions systematically.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Environmental problems such as pollution and climate change affect all the people in the world. Although global decisions are made to reduce these problems, the solutions are not effective. Why are the solutions ineffective? How can these problems be solved?
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