There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?
Sample Response
It is evident that mass car ownershipthe mass car ownership is associated with several environmental and health issues, including global warming, lung cancer, and anxiety. Although the convenience of possessing a car has made it an almost inevitable trendalmost an inexorable trend, there are measures that governments can take to discourage unnecessary car use.
The first and most effective measureThe first, and also the most effective measure could be to increase the cost of owning and using a carmake it expensive to own and use a car. This measure can be implemented by heavily taxing car purchasestaxing heavily on initial car purchasing, driving on congested roadscongested roads using, and petrol consumptionconsuming. By doing so, people might start considering reducing their car use, especially for unnecessary tripsthe unnecessary trips. However, there is a drawback of this approach that it is often the poorer residents will suffer from the increased costscost. The poor might have to cut some necessary trips because of the financial burden, whereas wealthier residentsthe rich ones would be able to retain the convenience of car usemaintain their convenience from car use. Therefore, this measure may be effective, but not fair to the poor.
Another way to discourage people from using their cars is to encourage them to useencourage them using alternative forms of transportalternative transports, such as trains, buses, and bicycles. Evidence has shown that cities, such as Tokyo and Paris, where better public transport systems are offered, car use rates are lower and roads are less congested. People will be willingonly be most willing to use public transports when they are almost or even more convenientconvenience than driving their cars. Therefore, governments could invest more in transport infrastructure, system design, and constructioninfrastructure and transport system design and construction in order to provide adequate and competitive alternatives.
To conclude, increasing the cost of having and using a car could be an effective way to reduce the car use. However, improving and encouraging the use of public transports could be the better and more sustainable way to achieve this goal.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response answers the question directly with two practical measures, explains how each could work, and thoughtfully acknowledges the fairness problem with higher motoring costs. Its progression is clear and the conclusion establishes a sensible priority, but recurring grammatical and collocational errors make otherwise mature ideas sound awkward. Focus first on accurate verb patterns, countability, and natural policy-related phrasing while preserving the strong development.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Two relevant solutions are clearly presented and developed, including useful consideration of effectiveness, fairness, and sustainability.
Add a little more detail about how public transport investment would specifically persuade current drivers to change behaviour.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear four-paragraph progression, and each main paragraph maintains a distinct and logically connected focus.
Streamline a few long sentences so qualifications and examples connect more smoothly to their main claims.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but repeated errors in collocation, word form, and countability reduce precision.
Use natural forms such as 'taxing car purchases', 'using congested roads', 'fuel consumption', and 'public transport'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of complex structures is attempted and meaning remains clear, although errors in articles, verb patterns, comparisons, and clause construction recur.
Practise gerund and infinitive patterns and edit complex sentences for complete clause structures and accurate comparatives.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?
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