Many people feel that media coverage has become increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?
Sample Response
Media has become an indispensable Part of the community to manage individual lifestyles in a good manner. But the majority deem that broadcast journalism gives inappropriate information related to some issue and is not able to show the actual story behind the coverage. I would like to explicate several factors responsible for this problem in this essay and suggest ways forward.
The first reason is the television rating point.TRP is a device that signifies or shows success on TV screens. It always attracts a massive chunk of individuals to watch any information on a large scale, so that general media always find unauthorised topics which people get fascinated with. As a result, they gain more profit with that. For instance, the Indian government imposed a law related to taxes, but the media telecasted the news and said the law was in favour of individuals even though they did not show the actual consequences would happen with this law. Apart from that, the media try to hide true information from the community so that situation is not able to control with partial news because people are easily distracted and involved in riots and turmoil, which is harmful to the nation, to cite an example, during the emergency in India when the nation suffered from COVID-19 pandemic media focused to recovery case’s and people moved freely without fear of the virus. As a result, the ratio of infected people gradually shifted to its peak, and the whole nation suffered from drastic consequences because of the media.
The solution is simple. All we need is awareness and strong willpower among the mass and authorities as well. As the first possible solution, the government could take some initiative against the false news broadcast by the media. As a result, the tendency of wrong information by media gradually declined and got focused on authorised information. Another feasible solution is that individuals make an effort then seek to know the ground reality of particular information rather than believing in rumours. Last but not least common, people use ample sources such as social media, so people easily follow the trusted channels which spread awareness about correct news in society.
In the end, it can be concluded that media should be banned if they find any illegal activities that disturb the ambience in countries. This may be taken to overcome this problem and stop the fake media before it becomes a menace to mankind.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix capitalization Original: Part Suggested revision: part Why it matters: A common noun within a sentence should not be capitalized.
- 2. Use natural context Original: of the community Suggested revision: in society Why it matters: “In society” naturally describes the media’s social role.
- 3. Clarify media role Original: to manage individual lifestyles in a good manner Suggested revision: in shaping people’s lives Why it matters: The revision expresses the intended influence more clearly and concisely.
- 4. Improve formal transition Original: But the majority deem that Suggested revision: However, most people believe that Why it matters: The revised transition and reporting phrase are clearer in this formal context.
- 5. Use precise collocation Original: gives inappropriate information Suggested revision: provides misleading information Why it matters: “Misleading information” accurately describes biased or unreliable reporting.
- 6. Use natural plural Original: related to some issue Suggested revision: about certain issues Why it matters: The plural phrase naturally refers to unspecified news topics.
- 7. Use direct wording Original: explicate Suggested revision: explain Why it matters: “Explain” is clearer and more natural in this sentence.
- 8. Use accurate noun Original: device Suggested revision: measure Why it matters: The sentence describes a measure of television performance rather than a physical device.
- 9. State meaning precisely Original: signifies or shows success Suggested revision: indicates a programme’s popularity Why it matters: The revision removes repetition and states what the measure represents.
- 10. Use audience term Original: massive chunk of individuals Suggested revision: large audience Why it matters: “Large audience” is the concise and natural term for many viewers.
- 11. Use natural object Original: watch any information Suggested revision: watch its content Why it matters: People watch media content rather than “information.”
- 12. Name organisations clearly Original: general media Suggested revision: media outlets Why it matters: “Media outlets” clearly identifies the organisations choosing topics.
Suggested Rewrites
- Part part
- of the community in society
- to manage individual lifestyles in a good manner in shaping people’s lives
- But the majority deem that However, most people believe that
- gives inappropriate information provides misleading information
- related to some issue about certain issues
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response covers both causes and solutions and uses a visible overall structure, with several relevant ideas about commercial pressure, regulation, and individual fact-checking. However, the reasoning is often unclear or weakly connected, especially in the long causes paragraph, while frequent collocation and sentence-control problems reduce precision. Prioritise selecting two clearly distinct causes and matching each to a specific, logically explained solution in shorter, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are addressed with relevant causes and remedies, but several explanations and examples are unclear, weakly supported, or only loosely tied to media bias.
Define two precise causes of bias and explain how each proposed measure would directly reduce that cause.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing separates the main stages of the response, but progression within the causes paragraph is difficult to follow and cohesive phrases are often mechanical.
Organise each body paragraph around one main idea and use shorter links that make the cause-and-effect sequence explicit.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a fairly broad range of vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate collocations and imprecise word choices sometimes obscure the intended meaning.
Prefer accurate, familiar terms for ratings, misinformation, regulation, and verification instead of forcing less controlled expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted frequently, but persistent errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, tense, and punctuation sometimes make ideas difficult to interpret.
Break long sentences into complete clauses and systematically check verb forms, articles, and punctuation for each sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people feel that media coverage has become increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?
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