Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. - comics - books - radio - television - film - theatre
Sample Response
In our daily life, we always communicate information through the media, such as television, radio, film, These media have different advantages and disadvantages for us. Now, I am going to compare the advantages and disadvantages of books, television and film. Books bring us different knowledge. It bases on what Book we read. A famous Chinese traditional verse which described books is a treasure. We can find a golden house in there. Moreover, when we want to read it, we can find it easily, such as bookstore, library. We can also learn a lot of words from books. And it can improve our reading and writing skills. However, books always are not attractive for children or youngster. It is because books are quite boring. A lot of words and less pictures inside the books, compare to television, television has pictures and sound, we don't have to read a lot of words in television. But some artist in television programme or film, bring a bad image to us. Then some children or youngers will imitate their behaviour. Some film also bring a wrong message to us, For example, they are always smoking in films. It seems that smoking is good and smart. It caused many youngers imitate them smoking. In conclusion, bookds, television and film have many advantages and disadvantages. I cannot write all in here. And we have choose the media carefully.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use plural expression Original: life Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: The plural possessive idea is more natural when referring to people collectively.
- 2. End the sentence Original: film, These Suggested revision: film. These Why it matters: A full stop is required between these two independent sentences.
- 3. Use natural collocation Original: bring us different knowledge Suggested revision: provide us with varied knowledge Why it matters: 'Provide someone with knowledge' is the natural collocation in this context.
- 4. Correct adjective order Original: Chinese traditional verse Suggested revision: traditional Chinese verse Why it matters: English normally places the descriptive adjective before the nationality adjective.
- 5. Fix clause structure Original: which described books is a treasure Suggested revision: describes books as a treasure Why it matters: The sentence needs a finite verb followed by the pattern 'describe something as'.
- 6. Clarify reference Original: there Suggested revision: books Why it matters: The vague location 'there' does not clearly refer back to books.
- 7. Fix pronoun reference Original: when we want to read it Suggested revision: when we want to read a book Why it matters: The singular pronoun has no clear singular antecedent.
- 8. Fix example phrase Original: easily, such as bookstore, library Suggested revision: easily in a bookstore or library Why it matters: Specific locations require articles and should be joined with 'or'.
- 9. Fix pronoun agreement Original: And it can improve Suggested revision: These books can also improve Why it matters: A plural subject is needed to refer clearly to books.
- 10. Correct adverb position Original: books always are not attractive Suggested revision: books are not always attractive Why it matters: 'Always' should follow the negated form of 'be' to express the intended meaning.
- 11. Fix number agreement Original: children or youngster Suggested revision: children or young people Why it matters: Both alternatives should be plural in this general statement.
- 12. Fix agreement and phrasing Original: some artist in television programme or film, bring a bad image to us Suggested revision: some artists in television programmes or films set a bad example for us Why it matters: Plural agreement is required, and 'set a bad example' is the natural expression.
Suggested Rewrites
- life lives
- film, These film. These
- bring us different knowledge provide us with varied knowledge
- Chinese traditional verse traditional Chinese verse
- which described books is a treasure describes books as a treasure
- there books
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response identifies the selected media and gives some understandable benefits and drawbacks, with a few relevant examples about learning and imitation. However, it is short, comparisons remain limited, and the required choice of the most effective medium is missing. The most important improvement is to state a clear choice and support it through direct, balanced comparisons, while using clearer paragraphing and more controlled sentence construction.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response discusses books, television, and film only partially and does not identify which medium is most effective, leaving a central instruction unanswered.
Choose the most effective medium explicitly and compare all selected media against consistent criteria such as accessibility, impact, and reliability.
Coherence and Cohesion
A basic movement from introduction to examples and conclusion is visible, but ideas are presented in one block with run-on sentences and weak logical connections.
Use separate paragraphs for each comparison and begin each one with a focused claim that is developed before moving to the next medium.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys the main ideas, but it is restricted and frequently inaccurate in spelling, word form, and collocation.
Build accurate topic phrases for media effects and replace repeated vague expressions such as good, bad, and bring a message with precise alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some subordinate structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, plurals, verb patterns, articles, and punctuation make many sentences difficult to process.
Write shorter complete sentences first, then check subject-verb agreement and verb patterns before combining ideas into complex sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. - comics - books - radio - television - film - theatre
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