You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world. Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter: - offer to make a popular dish from your country - describe what this dish is - explain why it should be included in the event
Sample Response
Dear Luis,
Thank you very much for your initiative to organise this fabulous event to celebrate famous food from all corners of the world. Here, I am writing to express my interest in contributing to the upcoming international food event. As a proud Canadian, I would love to prepare a traditional dish from my country called "poutine" for everyone to enjoy.
Poutine is a beloved Canadian dish that consists of crispy French fries topped with rich cheese curds and smothered in savoury brown gravy. Originating from Quebec, it has become an iconic comfort food across Canada and is enjoyed by people of all backgrounds. Some variations even include additional toppings such as smoked meat.
I believe poutine would be a great addition to the event because it represents Canadian cuisine’s fusion of simple ingredients with bold flavours. Moreover, its hearty and indulgent nature makes it a crowd-pleaser that I am sure many attendees would love to try.
Please let me know if I can go ahead with this contribution.
Looking forward to your response.
Yours sincerely,
Emma Johnson
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove awkward marker Original: Here, I am writing Suggested revision: I am writing Why it matters: Here does not refer to a meaningful place or stage in the letter and disrupts the opening.
- 2. Complete the sentence Original: Looking forward to your response. Suggested revision: I look forward to your response. Why it matters: Adding a finite subject and verb makes this a complete sentence.
- 3. Use natural phrasing Original: for your initiative to organise Suggested revision: for organising Why it matters: This is a more natural and concise way to thank Luis for arranging the event.
- 4. Moderate the tone Original: fabulous event Suggested revision: wonderful event Why it matters: Wonderful keeps the warm tone while sounding slightly more measured in this letter.
- 5. Use a precise noun Original: famous food Suggested revision: popular dishes Why it matters: Dishes is more natural than the uncountable food when referring to examples from many countries.
- 6. Use concise wording Original: from all corners of the world Suggested revision: from around the world Why it matters: The shorter phrase conveys the same global scope more directly.
- 7. Name the contribution Original: interest in contributing to Suggested revision: interest in contributing a dish to Why it matters: Adding the object clarifies exactly what the writer wishes to contribute.
- 8. Make the offer concise Original: a traditional dish from my country called "poutine" Suggested revision: a traditional Canadian dish called "poutine" Why it matters: This revision states the dish's origin more directly without changing the offer.
- 9. Condense the opening Suggested revision: Combine the thanks and offer into a tighter opening so the proposed contribution appears immediately after the greeting. Why it matters: The two opening sentences repeat the event context before reaching the letter's purpose.
- 10. Link details to guests Suggested revision: After describing the ingredients and variation, add a brief link showing why this flexible dish suits an international food event. Why it matters: This would make the descriptive detail work more directly toward the requested justification.
Suggested Rewrites
- Here, I am writing I am writing
- Looking forward to your response. I look forward to your response.
- for your initiative to organise for organising
- fabulous event wonderful event
- famous food popular dishes
- from all corners of the world from around the world
Why this response received Band 8.5
This is a focused, engaging letter that offers a suitable dish, describes it vividly, and gives convincing reasons for including it, all in a courteous register. The clear paragraphing and controlled language make the message effortless to follow. Only minor wording choices sound slightly formulaic or unnatural, so refining the opening would make this already accomplished response more polished.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The purpose is immediately clear, all three bullet points are fully and specifically developed, and the tone is consistently appropriate for the organiser.
Add one brief practical detail, such as serving requirements or portion planning, to make the offer even more actionable.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear function, and the progression from the offer to the description and justification is seamless and easy to follow.
The final two short requests could be combined into one concise closing paragraph for an even tighter finish.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied, precise, and natural, with effective food-related description such as 'cheese curds,' 'savoury brown gravy,' and 'crowd-pleaser'.
Replace the slightly unnatural phrase 'Here, I am writing' and avoid broad promotional wording such as 'fabulous event' for greater stylistic precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of structures is handled with high accuracy, and the few minor imperfections do not affect clarity.
Refine the opening sentence to avoid the slightly awkward combination of 'initiative to organise' and 'celebrate famous food'.