Band 7.5 IELTS General Training Writing Task 1 Correction

You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: - introduce yourself - describe your plans for the party - invite your neighbour to come

Sample Response

Dear Mr and Mrs Oliver,

I hope this letter finds you well. My name is Daniel, and I have recently moved into the house next to yours. I wanted to take a moment to introduce myself and also inform you about a small gathering I am planning.

I will be hosting a housewarming party on 14th March to celebrate my move and get to know friends and colleagues better. The event will begin around 6.30 PM, and more than 40 guests are expected to be present. We will host a dinner party that will include some music and game shows. While I will ensure that the noise remains at a reasonable level, I wanted to let you know in advance in case there is any disturbance.

Furthermore, I would love you to join us. It would be a great opportunity to meet properly, and I am sure you would enjoy the food and company. Please let me know if you are available - I would be delighted to have you there.

Looking forward to meeting you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Daniel Campbell

IELTS Writing Correction

  • 1. Add comma Original: Dear Mr and Mrs Oliver Suggested revision: Dear Mr and Mrs Oliver, Why it matters: A salutation normally ends with a comma.
  • 2. More precise Original: house next to yours Suggested revision: house next door to yours Why it matters: This sounds more natural for neighbours.
  • 3. Trim phrase Original: take a moment Suggested revision: write Why it matters: This polite filler is acceptable but not necessary.
  • 4. Accurate size Original: small gathering Suggested revision: housewarming party Why it matters: More than 40 guests is not really a small gathering.
  • 5. Date style Original: 14th March Suggested revision: 14 March Why it matters: Formal date style does not need the ordinal suffix.
  • 6. Time style Original: around 6.30 PM Suggested revision: around 6:30 p.m. Why it matters: The time format should be standardized.
  • 7. Soften impact Original: more than 40 guests Suggested revision: about 40 guests Why it matters: This sounds less alarming to a neighbour.
  • 8. Clearer purpose Original: friends and colleagues better Suggested revision: my friends and colleagues better Why it matters: Adding my clarifies whose relationships are meant.
  • 9. Avoid repetition Original: We will host a dinner party Suggested revision: We will serve dinner Why it matters: Party has already been introduced.
  • 10. Natural activity Original: game shows Suggested revision: games Why it matters: Game shows suggests a television programme, not a house party.
  • 11. Softer promise Original: While I will ensure Suggested revision: Although I will try to ensure Why it matters: Ensure may sound too absolute when discussing party noise.
  • 12. Natural phrase Original: in case there is any disturbance Suggested revision: in case it causes any disturbance Why it matters: This more clearly links disturbance to the party.

Suggested Rewrites

  • Dear Mr and Mrs Oliver Dear Mr and Mrs Oliver,
  • house next to yours house next door to yours
  • take a moment write
  • small gathering housewarming party
  • 14th March 14 March
  • around 6.30 PM around 6:30 p.m.
Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Feedback

The letter fully answers the task and uses a polite semi-formal tone. It introduces the writer, describes the party, acknowledges noise, and invites the neighbour.

Next step

Add a direct reassurance that the neighbour can contact you if the noise becomes inconvenient.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5
Feedback

Paragraphing and progression are clear. A few transitions could sound more natural.

Next step

Keep the structure but make the invitation transition warmer than “Furthermore”.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Feedback

Vocabulary is suitable and varied, though a few phrases are slightly awkward.

Next step

Use natural event vocabulary such as “party games”.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.5
Feedback

Grammar is accurate overall, with minor issues in date, time, and phrasing.

Next step

Check small formatting and collocation choices.