You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - describe the piece of equipment you have seen - why having the same equipment would be useful for your company - offer your assistance in buying the equipment
Sample Response
Dear Mr or Ms [Surname]Dear Sir or Madam, I am Duong Nguyen, a junior executive at Curl Business Incorporation, writing to recommend purchasing a bookshelfwriting to suggest a bookshelf for our office similar to one I sawthat I have seen in an office in Melbourne, Australia. I wentI had been to the regionalzonal office of Stack IT Ltd last week to attend a meeting. I was quite impressed when I noticed that many employees in that office were reading novels as well as professional-development booksprofessionally helpful books. The bookshelf was placed in a room where employees often relax and read newspapers. The rack was a large one, at least 7 by 5 feet, and was made of mahogany wood. The bookshelf has a rich collection, accessible to all employees. I feel that we can offer the same facility to our workers and this would be a great way to encourage them to read helpful books. Most of our employees, during their lunch and tea breaks, watch TV or gossip with each other. I believe placing a bookshelf with a rich collection of books would be beneficial to both employees and managementhelpful both for the employees and the authority. I can help you order such a shelf and survey employees abouttalk to employees to know their reading preferences. I would really appreciate your kind consideration of having a bookshelf full of books in our office. Yours faithfully, Duong Nguyen
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter presents a clear proposal, describes the bookshelf in useful detail, and explains both its benefits and the writer's willingness to help with the purchase. Its main weakness is presentation: the entire response forms one block, while several expressions are less natural than the otherwise strong language. Dividing the content into purposeful paragraphs and refining awkward collocations would make the recommendation more polished and persuasive.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are fully addressed, and the formal tone is consistently appropriate.
Make the purchasing assistance slightly more concrete by specifying how you would compare suppliers, costs, or delivery options.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress logically from the observed bookshelf to its benefits and the offer of help, but the single-block format weakens organisation.
Use separate paragraphs for the equipment description, the business case, and the practical offer of assistance.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently varied vocabulary communicates the proposal precisely, although phrases such as professionally helpful books and the authority sound unnatural.
Replace awkward collocations with more idiomatic choices such as professional-development books and both staff and the company.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex structures is used with generally strong control and only occasional non-impeding lapses.
Check tense consistency and article use when shifting between the bookshelf observed at the other office and the proposed one.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- describe the piece of equipment you have seen
- why having the same equipment would be useful for your company
- offer your assistance in buying the equipment
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