You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. In your letter: - invite him/her to a public event in your country - describe the public event - explain other plans you have for your friend - when he/she will visit
Sample Response
Dear Anila, I hope you're doing great and can write back to me about the things you've been doing these days. I would love to have you among us in India, and this coming Republic Day is an excellent opportunity to enjoy a public holiday together. You can fly to India from Kuwait on 24th January, and stay with us for a week or so. Last time you wrote to me that you've available paid vacations that you're planning to take. I think you should take it now and visit us. Republic Day, in India, honours the date on which the "Constitution of India" came into effect on 26 January 1950 replacing the Government of India Act (1935) as the governing document of India. On that day, we, as a nation, formally adopted the Constitution as the guiding document and became an independent republic! The main Republic Day celebration is held in the national capital, New Delhi, and this is an excellent opportunity to enjoy the national parade and show our respect. I also have several other plans for us. I'll take you to my cousin's graduation day, which is on 29th January. On the 31st night, we will have a party where I'll invite our common friends and welcome the new year. I'm eagerly waiting to hear that you would be able to make it. With love and warm wishes, Diya
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Natural invitation phrase Original: among us Suggested revision: with us Why it matters: With us is the natural phrase when inviting a friend to stay or celebrate together.
- 2. Remove unnecessary comma Original: 24th January, and stay Suggested revision: 24th January and stay Why it matters: A comma should not separate two coordinated verb phrases with the same subject.
- 3. Correct possession structure Original: you've available paid vacations Suggested revision: you have paid leave available Why it matters: The contraction you've cannot directly modify the noun phrase available paid vacations in this structure.
- 4. Match the reference Original: take it Suggested revision: take some of it Why it matters: The pronoun should refer clearly to the available paid leave rather than to an unclear singular item.
- 5. Remove interrupting commas Original: Republic Day, in India, Suggested revision: Republic Day in India Why it matters: The location phrase is essential to the meaning here and should not be enclosed by commas.
- 6. Separate participle phrase Original: 26 January 1950 replacing Suggested revision: 26 January 1950, replacing Why it matters: A comma is needed before the following participial phrase.
- 7. Remove unnecessary quotes Original: "Constitution of India" Suggested revision: Constitution of India Why it matters: The formal title does not need quotation marks in this sentence.
- 8. Use precise event noun Original: graduation day Suggested revision: graduation ceremony Why it matters: Graduation ceremony is the more precise term for the event being attended.
- 9. Correct time phrase Original: On the 31st night Suggested revision: On the night of the 31st Why it matters: The night of the 31st is the standard English time expression.
- 10. Resolve date conflict Original: welcome the new year Suggested revision: celebrate together Why it matters: This avoids the internal conflict between a party on 31 January and welcoming the new year.
- 11. Use direct future form Original: would be able Suggested revision: will be able Why it matters: Will is appropriate for the hoped-for future confirmation in this sentence.
- 12. Format the sign-off Original: With love and warm wishes, Diya Suggested revision: With love and warm wishes, Diya Why it matters: The sender's name should appear on a new line after the complimentary close.
Suggested Rewrites
- among us with us
- 24th January, and stay 24th January and stay
- you've available paid vacations you have paid leave available
- take it take some of it
- Republic Day, in India, Republic Day in India
- 26 January 1950 replacing 26 January 1950, replacing
Why this response received Band 7.0
This is a warm, purposeful invitation that covers the event, visit dates, and additional plans with relevant detail and an appropriate informal tone. Its main weakness is presentation: the ideas run together in one long block, while a few awkward phrases and a questionable New Year reference reduce precision. Organising the invitation, event description, and itinerary into distinct paragraphs should be the first priority.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter clearly fulfils the invitation purpose and addresses every bullet point with relevant detail in a friendly register.
Make the proposed schedule fully credible by resolving the confusing reference to welcoming the new year on 31 January.
Coherence and Cohesion
The message progresses from the invitation to the event description and other plans, but the single-block presentation weakens organisation.
Use separate paragraphs for the invitation and dates, the event description, and the additional itinerary.
Lexical Resource
A good range of vocabulary communicates the event and plans clearly, despite several unnatural collocations.
Replace phrases such as 'have you among us' and 'available paid vacations' with more natural informal English.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied sentence structures are generally well controlled, with only occasional non-impeding errors in agreement, form, and punctuation.
Proofread auxiliary and pronoun choices, especially constructions such as 'you've available' and 'take it now'.