Your friend has had his/her first book published a few days ago. He/she has recently sent you a copy of that book. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, congratulate him/her for having his/her first book published thank your friend for sending you a copy of the book say what do you think about the book
Sample Response
Dear Charles, You must be pretty excited to have your first book published within such a short time after finishing writing it. It is indeed such a great achievement of yours, and I surely would like to congratulate you on the occasion of such an amazing success. I also would like to thank you for sending me a copy of this book right away with your special signature on it. Anyway, I've already read your book, and I must tell you that I'm truly impressed with your novel writing skills and abilities. I knew that you were passionate about writing stories, but I just didn’t think that you'd be able to write a novel with such ease and effect. The narrator (the main character) of your novel was very engaging while the other characters around it were as natural and lively as they could get. The caption of the book under the picture of a beautiful and playful rabbit is very illustrative, and the plot has just about enough twists and turns to engage the readers from start to end. All in all, it is a great book. I'm sure this is the first book of a series of marvellous writings that we will see in the future. Warm wishes, Adam
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Concise phrase Original: within such a short time Suggested revision: so soon Why it matters: This is more natural.
- 2. Concise wording Original: after finishing writing it Suggested revision: after finishing it Why it matters: Avoid repeating “writing”.
- 3. Wordy phrase Original: achievement of yours Suggested revision: achievement Why it matters: The extra words are unnecessary.
- 4. Direct phrase Original: congratulate you on the occasion Suggested revision: congratulate you on Why it matters: The longer phrase is too formal.
- 5. Word order Original: I also would like Suggested revision: I would also like Why it matters: This is standard word order.
- 6. Appreciative tone Original: right away Suggested revision: so promptly Why it matters: This better fits the thank-you sentence.
- 7. Avoid redundancy Original: novel writing skills and abilities Suggested revision: novel-writing skills Why it matters: “Skills and abilities” repeats the idea.
- 8. Wrong noun Original: with such ease and effect Suggested revision: with such ease and impact Why it matters: “Impact” is the intended meaning.
- 9. Pronoun reference Original: around it Suggested revision: around him Why it matters: Use a person pronoun for the character.
- 10. Book term Original: The caption of the book Suggested revision: The cover design Why it matters: This seems to mean the cover, not a caption.
- 11. Natural adjective Original: very illustrative Suggested revision: very appealing Why it matters: “Illustrative” is not natural here.
- 12. Fixed phrase Original: from start to end Suggested revision: from beginning to end Why it matters: Use the standard expression.
Suggested Rewrites
- within such a short time so soon
- after finishing writing it after finishing it
- achievement of yours achievement
- congratulate you on the occasion congratulate you on
- I also would like I would also like
- right away so promptly
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter congratulates the friend, thanks them for the copy, and gives an opinion of the book.
Keep the relevant content, then revise the wording and organisation points highlighted in the essay comments.
Coherence and Cohesion
The progression is friendly and clear, but the one-block format and repeated praise make the middle dense.
Use clearer paragraphing and smoother links so each bullet point is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is warm and varied, though some literary-review wording is inaccurate or unnatural.
Prefer natural collocations and precise topic vocabulary over overformal or translated-sounding phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is generally controlled, with minor preposition, pronoun and noun-choice issues.
Proofread tense, articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries before submitting.