You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation in your office about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: - describe what type of presentation you have in mind - what topics it would cover and how long it would take - who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted
Sample Response
Dear Mr Walee, I have recently attended a conference in Dubai and I believe I have gained valuable informationaccumulated some valuable information about call-forwarding technologyin call forwarding technology, roaming and data transfer in the telecom industry. I am wondering if you would permit me to give a presentation to our team in order to offer them insights intopresent them with some insights into recent developments in telecommunicationswhat the recent telecom world looks like. My plan for the presentationpresentation session is to cover two important topics that were discussedtopics which were reported at the conference I attended. I am planning to gatherI am thinking to get the teamguys gathered in the meeting room on Monday morning at 9:00 a.m.Monday morning, at 9:00 am. With your permission, I will deliverdo it in two separate sessions covering the following topicsto present topics - "Modern challenges facing mobile telecom in international call forwarding, roaming and data clusterisation" and "New emerging services". I think the presentation will last for two hours, an hour for each module. I have attached the materials that I will usematerials which will be narrated in the session. Your approval is kindly requested for the content of the presentation and for the membersmember of the team to attend it. My suggestion is to involve the whole team as the content is highly relevant toit is extremely important related to our work environment and job performance. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon regarding this. Yours sincerely, Alwhab Mansur
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter achieves its request clearly and covers the proposed content, timing, audience, and venue with useful detail. Its main weakness is presentation: the response is a single dense paragraph, while several awkward phrases and the informal word choice ‘guys’ reduce professional polish. Prioritise dividing the letter into purposeful paragraphs and revising unnatural expressions for a consistently formal, precise tone.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The request is clear, all three bullet points are addressed with relevant detail, and the tone is generally suitable for a manager.
Maintain a consistently professional register by replacing informal wording such as ‘the guys’ and clarifying exactly what form each presentation session will take.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a sensible sequence, but presenting the entire letter as one paragraph weakens organisation and readability.
Use separate paragraphs for the request, presentation plan, audience and venue, and closing approval request.
Lexical Resource
The letter uses a good range of topic-specific vocabulary, though several combinations such as ‘materials which will be narrated’ sound unnatural.
Choose more natural professional collocations, for example ‘materials that will be presented’ and ‘developments in the telecommunications industry’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, but recurring errors in complementation, number, and clause construction reduce accuracy.
Review patterns such as ‘thinking of getting’, plural agreement in ‘members’, and the structure of ‘important to our work and performance’.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation in your office about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter:
- describe what type of presentation you have in mind
- what topics it would cover and how long it would take
- who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted
Your response
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