A friend has written a letter informing you about his or her plan to visit your country/city. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter write: - what he or she can do in your country/city advise him/her about the place he/she could stay at - suggest to him/her - what to pack and bring while coming to travel to your country/city
Sample Response
Dear Jonathan, Hope you're doing great. I'm very exhilarated to know that you'll come to my city with your family next month. It's an excellent decision to visit Singapore during your children's school vacation, and I'm sure you all will enjoy your time. After you reach my city, we can book tickets for Night Safari, Adventure Cove Park and Universal Studio. Those are quite popular among tourists, and I've specifically selected them considering your children. I would love to have you at my house. I have a large house and you will enjoy your privacy. However, if you would like to stay separate, my suggestion is Bukit Timah Road. So, book the Banana Leaf Hotel or Pandora Hotel if you must stay at a Hotel. But I insist that you stay at my place. As I know, your 'princess daughter' is only three years old. You should pack her food and suitable dresses for the summer. It is advisable to bring the necessary medicines with you. Without a prescription, you won't be able to purchase any medicine here. See you at Changi Airport on the 28th of July. With Best Regards Eirene
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add sentence subject Original: Hope you're doing great. Suggested revision: I hope you're doing great. Why it matters: The sentence needs an explicit subject in standard written English.
- 2. Use natural enthusiasm Original: very exhilarated Suggested revision: thrilled Why it matters: This is a more natural way to express excitement in a friendly letter.
- 3. Smooth visit wording Original: you'll come to my city Suggested revision: you'll be visiting my city Why it matters: This wording sounds more natural when referring to an arranged trip.
- 4. Improve adverb position Original: you all will enjoy Suggested revision: you will all enjoy Why it matters: Placing “all” after the auxiliary gives the more usual word order.
- 5. Use broader activity verb Original: book tickets for Suggested revision: visit Why it matters: The broader verb fits all three attractions without focusing unnecessarily on ticketing.
- 6. Strengthen description Original: quite popular Suggested revision: very popular Why it matters: This gives the recommendation a clearer and more direct emphasis.
- 7. Use natural invitation Original: have you at my house Suggested revision: have you stay with me Why it matters: This phrase more clearly expresses the offer of accommodation.
- 8. Clarify accommodation choice Original: stay separate Suggested revision: stay elsewhere Why it matters: “Stay separate” is not the natural phrase for choosing different accommodation.
- 9. Lowercase common noun Original: a Hotel Suggested revision: a hotel Why it matters: A common noun should not be capitalised in the middle of this sentence.
- 10. Soften the contrast Original: But I insist Suggested revision: However, I still hope Why it matters: This transition keeps the friendly insistence while linking more smoothly to the alternative.
- 11. Correct opening clause Original: As I know Suggested revision: I know that Why it matters: The original introductory phrase does not connect grammatically to the statement that follows.
- 12. Use natural endearment Original: 'princess daughter' Suggested revision: little princess Why it matters: This is a more idiomatic affectionate expression for the child.
Suggested Rewrites
- Hope you're doing great. I hope you're doing great.
- very exhilarated thrilled
- you'll come to my city you'll be visiting my city
- you all will enjoy you will all enjoy
- book tickets for visit
- quite popular very popular
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter fully addresses the visit by recommending family-friendly activities, offering clear accommodation choices, and giving practical packing advice in a warm, personal tone. Its main weakness is occasionally awkward or overly formal wording, while the lack of paragraph breaks makes the sequence less polished than the content. Prioritise natural collocations and organise the advice into short thematic paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The purpose is fully achieved through relevant, developed advice on activities, accommodation, and what to bring, with an appropriately friendly tone.
Refine the closing and a few recommendations so every detail sounds consistently natural and informal.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress logically from activities to accommodation and packing, with clear connections throughout.
Use separate paragraphs for the visit plans, lodging, and packing advice to make the organisation more immediately visible.
Lexical Resource
The letter uses a sufficiently varied vocabulary for travel and hospitality, though several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Replace expressions such as 'very exhilarated' and 'suitable dresses for the summer' with more natural everyday phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex structures is used with generally good control, and the remaining errors do not impede meaning.
Improve article use, punctuation, and sentence openings such as 'As I know' to achieve more consistent accuracy.