A friend has written a letter informing you about his or her plan to visit your country/city. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter write: - what he or she can do in your country/city advise him/her about the place he/she could stay at - suggest to him/her - what to pack and bring while coming to travel to your country/city
This response is estimated at Band 7.5. Can you write a better one?
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Sample Response
Dear Jonathan, I hope you're doing great.Hope you're doing great. I'm thrilledvery exhilarated to know that you'll be visiting my cityyou'll come to my city with your family next month. It's an excellent decision to visit Singapore during your children's school vacation, and I'm sure you will all enjoyyou all will enjoy your time. After you reach my city, we can visitbook tickets for Night Safari, Adventure Cove Park and Universal Studio. Those are veryquite popular among tourists, and I've specifically selected them considering your children. I would love to have you stay with mehave you at my house. I have a large house and you will enjoy your privacy. However, if you would like to stay elsewhereseparate, my suggestion is Bukit Timah Road. So, book the Banana Leaf Hotel or Pandora hotelHotel if you must stay at a Hotel. However, I still hopeBut I insist that you stay at my place. I know thatAs I know, your little princess'princess daughter' is only three years old. You should pack some food for herher food and suitable dresses for the summer. It is advisable to bring the necessary medicines with you. Without a prescription, you won't be able to purchase any medicine here. See you at Changi Airport on the 28th of July. Best regards,With Best Regards Eirene
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter fully addresses the visit by recommending family-friendly activities, offering clear accommodation choices, and giving practical packing advice in a warm, personal tone. Its main weakness is occasionally awkward or overly formal wording, while the lack of paragraph breaks makes the sequence less polished than the content. Prioritise natural collocations and organise the advice into short thematic paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is fully achieved through relevant, developed advice on activities, accommodation, and what to bring, with an appropriately friendly tone.
Refine the closing and a few recommendations so every detail sounds consistently natural and informal.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress logically from activities to accommodation and packing, with clear connections throughout.
Use separate paragraphs for the visit plans, lodging, and packing advice to make the organisation more immediately visible.
Lexical Resource
The letter uses a sufficiently varied vocabulary for travel and hospitality, though several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Replace expressions such as 'very exhilarated' and 'suitable dresses for the summer' with more natural everyday phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex structures is used with generally good control, and the remaining errors do not impede meaning.
Improve article use, punctuation, and sentence openings such as 'As I know' to achieve more consistent accuracy.