Safety standards are important when building people's homes. Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes – the government or the people who build the homes? The population of the world is increasing and so does the needs for more houses, commercial buildings and other constructions are escalating as well. The high rising buildings constructions, wood-house constructions etc. require more safety & standard issues while this is being violated often and accidents related to building constructions are increasing. Some people opine that Government is solely responsible to ensuring the safety and codes while others believe that house owners are the persons who should be responsible. In my opinion, a government has a role in setting the rules and following it but it the owners and authority of the building owners who should ensure the standard and safety while constructing the houses and commercial buildings. First of all, it is out of the scope for the government to appoint necessary manpower and monitoring system in every place where the construction works would occur. Before building any house, people must take the permission from the authority and build the house accordingly. But any accident occurs due to the lack of safety procedure; improper use of tools and materials, unskilled labour, unnecessary rush would be because of the owner’s failure to comply the codes. The workers, who work for contractions; including the architect, engineer and labour, should know the safety rules and codes and also should protest when they believe that a rule might have been violated and ignored. The labours should never assent to work in a position which is harmful and risky for them, the engineers should maintain the strict rules instead of blindly following the construction owners order and the local authority should time to time monitor the constructions to avoid the hazards. In conclusion, the Government does not have the necessary scope to monitor each & every construction in a country and the house owners must know the safety procedures, standards and rules to make sure the safety.
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( Viewpoint: Both Government & People should be careful and responsible)
People aspire to build their homes to suit their tastes as well as that of their family. While several houses are constructed on a regular basis, there have been questions on the safety standards adopted in such constructions, thus endangering not only the lives of homeowners but also of those in the neighbourhood and the society at large. While some people opine that the responsibility of ensuring a quality construction lies with the owners, there are others who believe that the onus lies with the government. This essay will discuss both points of view. To begin, houses that are being constructed by those in the lower income groups do look at the most cost effective option. In the process, they invariably explore cheaper options that include a compromise on material and construction quality. This ultimately leads to a house construction that is inferior and might not comply with even the basic safety standards. For example, there are several instances where even a moderate amount of rainfall has led to the houses getting washed away. There are also cases where minor tremors have led to the collapse of the entire building. Further, compromising on the quality of electrical wiring can lead to short circuit and hence a fire, that can affect not just the house owner, but can lead to severe loss of lives and property in the entire neighbourhood. In my opinion, the solution to the problem lies with having a regulatory body to monitor the quality of building constructions. The regulatory body should be under the Government. The safety standards and the minimum specification of materials that can be used in any house constructions need to be clearly defined. This should include essential parameters such as foundation strength, structure strength, electrical wiring specification, water resistant material etc. Further, at various stages of construction, the owner needs to approach the authority for approval. Upon such requests, the authority needs to carry random audits before approval. This would not only put a system in place but also serves as a deterrent to house owners who intend to compromise on construction quality. In conclusion, while the quality of house constructions at present pose a grave danger to the society, there is certainly an opportunity in this challenge, to put forth a system that would be robust and go a long way in ensuring that building constructions of the future adhere to the specified standards and are completely safe to both the owners as well as the society at large.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove inner space Original: ( Viewpoint Suggested revision: (Viewpoint Why it matters: An opening parenthesis should not be followed by a space.
- 2. Use formal conjunction Original: Government & People Suggested revision: government and people Why it matters: Common nouns should be lowercase, and an ampersand is inappropriate in formal prose.
- 3. Match plural tastes Original: that of their family Suggested revision: those of their families Why it matters: The plural noun “tastes” requires the plural pronoun “those,” and each person has a family.
- 4. Make structure parallel Original: but also of those Suggested revision: but also those Why it matters: The structure should parallel “not only the lives” with “but also those,” without an extra “of.”
- 5. Remove unnecessary article Original: neighbourhood and the society at large Suggested revision: neighbourhood and society at large Why it matters: The fixed expression is “society at large” without “the.”
- 6. Use natural reporting verb Original: opine Suggested revision: argue Why it matters: “Argue” is more natural and direct than “opine” in this context.
- 7. Fix construction collocation Original: ensuring a quality construction Suggested revision: ensuring construction quality Why it matters: “Construction quality” describes the standard of the work more naturally than “a quality construction.”
- 8. Fix compromise collocation Original: include a compromise on material and construction quality Suggested revision: involve compromises in material and construction quality Why it matters: Options “involve compromises in” quality rather than “include a compromise on” it.
- 9. Use concise noun phrase Original: a house construction that is inferior Suggested revision: an inferior house Why it matters: The revision removes the unnatural expression “a house construction.”
- 10. Use concise weather term Original: moderate amount of rainfall Suggested revision: moderate rainfall Why it matters: “Rainfall” already denotes an amount, so the longer phrase is redundant.
- 11. Fix solution collocation Original: lies with having a regulatory body Suggested revision: lies in establishing a regulatory body Why it matters: A solution “lies in” an action rather than “lies with having” something.
- 12. Use uncountable construction Original: constructions Suggested revision: construction Why it matters: “Construction” is uncountable when it refers generally to the building process.
Suggested Rewrites
- ( Viewpoint (Viewpoint
- Government & People government and people
- that of their family those of their families
- but also of those but also those
- neighbourhood and the society at large neighbourhood and society at large
- opine argue
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear explanation of why unsafe cost-cutting creates risks and how government oversight could work. Its main limitation is that the position is not stated consistently: the introduction promises both views, the body ultimately favours regulation, and the conclusion avoids directly assigning responsibility. Make the thesis explicit from the outset and organise each main paragraph around one side before reaching a decisive answer.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both sides are addressed with relevant, extended ideas, but the preferred allocation of responsibility is not consistently explicit throughout.
State a clear position in the introduction and conclusion, then evaluate the responsibilities of builders and government directly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through the risks of poor construction and a proposed regulatory solution, with generally effective cohesion.
Use each body paragraph to develop one clearly signposted side of the responsibility debate and avoid an overly broad final statement.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently wide vocabulary conveys construction risks and regulation precisely, despite some awkward or repetitive collocations.
Refine phrases such as house construction, structure strength, and quality construction into more natural, varied collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is used with good control, and occasional agreement or punctuation slips do not impede meaning.
Proofread long sentences for subject-verb agreement, article use, and cleaner clause boundaries.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Safety standards are important when building people's homes. Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes – the government or the people who build the homes? The population of the world is increasing and so does the needs for more houses, commercial buildings and other constructions are escalating as well. The high rising buildings constructions, wood-house constructions etc. require more safety & standard issues while this is being violated often and accidents related to building constructions are increasing. Some people opine that Government is solely responsible to ensuring the safety and codes while others believe that house owners are the persons who should be responsible. In my opinion, a government has a role in setting the rules and following it but it the owners and authority of the building owners who should ensure the standard and safety while constructing the houses and commercial buildings. First of all, it is out of the scope for the government to appoint necessary manpower and monitoring system in every place where the construction works would occur. Before building any house, people must take the permission from the authority and build the house accordingly. But any accident occurs due to the lack of safety procedure; improper use of tools and materials, unskilled labour, unnecessary rush would be because of the owner’s failure to comply the codes. The workers, who work for contractions; including the architect, engineer and labour, should know the safety rules and codes and also should protest when they believe that a rule might have been violated and ignored. The labours should never assent to work in a position which is harmful and risky for them, the engineers should maintain the strict rules instead of blindly following the construction owners order and the local authority should time to time monitor the constructions to avoid the hazards. In conclusion, the Government does not have the necessary scope to monitor each & every construction in a country and the house owners must know the safety procedures, standards and rules to make sure the safety.
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