Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends, others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and appreciation. Which point of view do you agree with?
Sample Response
Exchanging presents has been a long-standinglongtime tradition rooted in human historyembedded within human history. Although some believe that there are other ways to replace this practicemethods to replace such practice, it is clearperceivable that giving gifts is still the most effectiveinfluential way to show one's love and care. This statement will be analysed in the following paragraphs, supported by relevant examples.
Tangible presents can last for many yearsexist eternally and can thereforeand this thus can remind the recipient of the giverthe giver of the gift for a long time. Although actions taken such as sharing meaningful words can be emotionally effective, they are expected to be evanescent as time elapses. Presents, however, can leave one with a solid memory of a particular person and their feelingshis thoughts. In fact, as is the case with many loyal families' custom, they focus on sending out presents to their loved ones more than doing anything else so that their affinity can be remembered for generations.
Practicality is another distinctive aspect that presents can offer. For example, my grandmother has been suffering from muscular pain for a long time. Although she would appreciate our effort to spend time with her to express our affection, giving her a massage machine could be more efficient. The present would not only show our care but also offer a solution to her long-term health problemlifetime health problem. Hence, it can be demonstrated that presents intensify one's sense of affinity by fulfilling two purposes:dual purposes; showing one's love and giving what the person needswhat the person is in need of. This clearly substantiatesThis then clearly substantiate that gifts contain greater meaningmore meaningful terms than expressing affectionsharing endearment.
In conclusion, the aforementioned ideas evidently encapsulate the two reasons explaining how tangible presents can be the most effective waycan the most effective way to display someone's love.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear position and supports it with two relevant reasons, including a particularly concrete example about a practical gift. Development is sometimes weakened by overgeneralisation and imprecise phrasing, while several grammatical slips reduce polish without obscuring meaning. Prioritise more exact explanations of how each example proves the claim, alongside careful control of collocations and sentence endings.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is consistently supported by two relevant and reasonably developed reasons.
Qualify broad claims and explain more precisely why the examples establish that gifts are more important than other forms of care.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Strengthen links within the first body paragraph so that the family example follows more directly from the point about lasting memories.
Lexical Resource
A good range of vocabulary conveys the argument, but several awkward collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace strained expressions with more idiomatic choices, especially when describing memories, affection, and practical benefits.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex structures are used successfully, although recurring agreement, article, and missing-word errors remain noticeable.
Proofread clause endings and subject-verb agreement carefully to eliminate errors in otherwise ambitious sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends, others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and appreciation. Which point of view do you agree with?
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