Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basic produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Sample Response

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This is the era ofor globalisation and world trade and business. This has enabled us to maintain better diplomatic and business relationshipskeep better diplomatic and business relationship with many other countries and products produced in one country can easily be foundproducts produced in a country could easily be found in another country. However, this requires products and food to travelrequires the products and foods to be travelled overto a long distance before reaching consumersbefore reaching to the consumers of other countries and this has both negative and positive consequences. In my opinion, this has far more advantages than the drawbacks.

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On the one handOn one hand, a country should first try to be self-sufficient rather than relying heavily on imported goods. Foods, vegetables and fruits should not be imported from other countries since the long distance travel of such commodities degrades their nutritional valuedegraded their food values. Moreover, importing from other countries is quite costly. Finally, a country should try to produce daily necessities by itselfthemselves as it would eradicate poverty and unemploymenteradicate the poverty, unemployment and would also ensure stronger economic growthmake sure the better economic progress of a country.

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On the contrary, the advantages of the global economy and trade are highlighted often and it is true that complete self-sufficiency is impossible for every countrybeing self-sufficient for all countries are quite impossible. Some countries are better for agriculture, some for industrial productions, some for food processing and some others for technologies and thus each nation has their unique ability to do well in some specific sectors. Thus no country can locally produce everything their people need. First and foremost advantages of importing products from other countries is that a country can enjoy those short of goods without even producing them. For instance, many countries enjoy tea and coffee even though they do not locally produce them. Second, sometimes importing is less expensive than producing something and not every country has the environment and manpower to do so. Third, transportation systems are becomingtransportation system nowadays is becoming more efficient and in the near future, it will take less time to supply goods from oneanother country to another. The global economy enables a country to export products to other nations rather than wasting them and this has proven to be a significant source of revenuestrong revenue earning area for many countries. People nowadays have more choices of their products and global economy hit the monopoly so hard that people can enjoy global branded products at a competitive price.

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In summary, more time to transport daily commodities from one country to other has some demerits. However the endless advantages they bring are quite overwhelming.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The essay establishes a clear judgement that international trade brings greater benefits and offers a particularly wide range of relevant advantages, including specialisation, consumer choice, lower costs, export revenue, and competition. Its main limitation is that the case becomes list-like and contains frequent grammatical and collocational errors, while the disadvantages are compared less directly. Prioritise selecting fewer claims, developing each with evidence, and explicitly weighing them against transport cost and spoilage.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

The position is clear, both sides are addressed, and numerous relevant advantages are explained, though several claims remain asserted rather than fully supported or compared.

Next step

Select the strongest two or three benefits and show explicitly why they outweigh spoilage, transport expense, and pressure on local production.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

The argument follows a logical four-part structure, but the long advantages paragraph relies on mechanical enumeration and contains too many separate claims.

Next step

Divide the advantages into focused paragraphs on access and cost, then trade revenue and competition, with one developed idea per section.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The response uses a good range of trade and economics vocabulary, but frequent awkward combinations such as 'products to be travelled' and 'hit the monopoly' reduce precision.

Next step

Use natural alternatives such as 'goods must be transported', 'export revenue', and 'increase competition in the market'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

A variety of complex forms is used and meaning remains clear, but agreement, article, passive, and pronoun errors recur throughout.

Next step

Check subject-verb agreement and countability in forms such as 'self-sufficiency is impossible', 'the main advantage is', and 'each nation has its'.

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