Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools.
Sample Response
Boys' schools and girls' schoolsBoys school and girls school are growing rapidlyshoot up very rapidly both in foreign countries and at home. Some prefer to send their childrenkids to a unisexual school and some prefer a coeducational institutiona co-education institute. Many sociologists and educationalists present their views on this issue from different perspectivesfrom one side or another. However, I believe that both have positive and negative effects.
Some parents prefer to send their children to boys' schools or girls' schoolsboys school or girls schools in the hope that their children can concentrate on their studiesconcentrate on study and acquire adequate knowledge and skills because unisexual schools can design appropriate curriculamake out appropriate curriculum and courses for students according to sex-specific needsaccording to their sexual characteristics. Again, many guardians think that their kids might be negatively influenced by contact with the opposite sexspoiled by the contact of opposite sex, especially those who are religiously conservative, prefer a unisexual institute. In some girls' schoolsIn some girl schools, students have a wider choice of courses such as dancing, music, embroidery and drawing, which can cultivate their feminine elegance and charm. Furthermore, students can devote themselves fully to their studiesstudy and will not be distracted. Campus love affairs are very common in the current society under the influence of the mediaunder the influence of media. Boys' schools and girls' schoolsBoy schools and girl schools can eradicate contact between thedifferent sexes and purify the campus environment.
Of course, some experts point out that boys school and girls school are not beneficial to the adolescent development of students. They believe that boys or girls are likely to develop their abilities and stimulate their imagination when they are studying with the opposite sexes. Besides, students can cultivate their interpersonal skills. Some other people think that separating boys from girls can cause some psychological problems to youngsters. Meanwhile, this separation affects social progress and leadslead to sexism. Investigation shows that graduates from unisexual schools are not aware how to get along with their colleagues in their career.
To conclude, everything has double folds and unisexual schools are no exception. From my point of view, I think the existence of unisexual schools meets the need of some parents. But it is definitely not a paradise for their children.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay discusses both advantages and disadvantages in a clear structure and supports each side with several relevant ideas. The main weakness is that some claims are stereotyped or asserted rather than carefully explained, while recurring non-idiomatic wording and grammatical errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop fewer, stronger arguments with neutral evidence and more accurate sentence construction.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both sides are addressed fully enough, with a clear conclusion and several relevant supporting points.
Develop the strongest advantages and disadvantages more critically instead of relying on broad assumptions about gender and behaviour.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are organised into a logical four-paragraph progression with clear movement between the two sides.
Strengthen cohesion within the body paragraphs by grouping closely related claims and avoiding abrupt shifts between examples.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range of education-related vocabulary, but frequent awkward collocations reduce naturalness and precision.
Use more idiomatic academic phrasing and replace expressions such as exaggerated growth or campus purification with precise neutral language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted regularly, but errors in articles, possessives, agreement, and clause control occur frequently.
Edit noun phrases and long multi-clause sentences carefully, with particular attention to plural possessives and subject-verb agreement.
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