In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
At recent years, there is an ongoing debate whether all of the people are equal to be artists or it is supposed to be the talented ones who are worth to do arts. I believe that talented people should be appreciated for their masterpiece, and throughout this essay, I will give several considerations relating to my notion. Each people has their own capabilities, interests, and talents. It is a fact that drummers master the drum music field such as the equipment, sophisticated techniques, etc. by autodidact or train themselves in certain courses to gain maximum skills and to be hired by a famous band. However, drummers may not have quite interests in acting or painting. As a consequence, the term 'anyone can do it' may be possible but the product of arts will not be a masterpiece.
It is inevitable that the equal rights to do everything including to choose the profession as an artist is undeniable. As a consequence, every people wants to be a famous artist because of the popularity and the huge salary. This leads to a complicated problem for finding the true talents in doing the performance. To overcome this, managers, agents, and talents searching events are the bucket of solutions to look for the real talents needed by the arts industries.
To sum up, 'anyone can do it' is a term caused by equal human rights among the people but people with original talents and interests accompanied by maximum development efforts are worthier to be appreciated as an art which they produced is overwhelming.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct time preposition Original: At Suggested revision: In Why it matters: A period of years takes the preposition “in.”
- 2. Add required preposition Original: debate whether Suggested revision: debate about whether Why it matters: The noun “debate” requires “about” before a whether-clause.
- 3. Remove unnecessary words Original: all of the people Suggested revision: all people Why it matters: The general reference does not require “of the.”
- 4. Clarify intended ability Original: are equal to be artists Suggested revision: are equally capable of becoming artists Why it matters: The original phrase does not clearly express equal artistic capability.
- 5. Complete whether contrast Original: or it is supposed to be Suggested revision: or whether it should be Why it matters: The parallel “whether ... or whether” structure makes the alternatives clear.
- 6. Correct complement pattern Original: worth to do arts Suggested revision: worthy of creating art Why it matters: “Worthy” takes “of” plus a gerund, and “art” is uncountable here.
- 7. Use plural noun Original: masterpiece Suggested revision: masterpieces Why it matters: The plural subject refers to works produced by multiple people.
- 8. State purpose directly Original: considerations relating to my notion Suggested revision: reasons supporting my view Why it matters: The replacement uses precise academic wording for the coming argument.
- 9. Use singular person noun Original: people Suggested revision: person Why it matters: “Each” must modify a singular countable noun.
- 10. Use process noun Original: by autodidact Suggested revision: through self-study Why it matters: “Autodidact” names a self-taught person, not a method of learning.
- 11. Use parallel verb phrase Original: or train themselves in certain courses Suggested revision: or take specific courses Why it matters: The replacement is parallel with “through self-study” and uses the correct course collocation.
- 12. Use natural collocation Original: gain maximum skills Suggested revision: develop their skills fully Why it matters: Skills are developed rather than gained to a maximum.
Suggested Rewrites
- At In
- debate whether debate about whether
- all of the people all people
- are equal to be artists are equally capable of becoming artists
- or it is supposed to be or whether it should be
- worth to do arts worthy of creating art
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response shows some relevant thinking about artistic specialisation and the need to identify genuine talent, with the drummer example offering its clearest support. However, its exact agreement with the full claim remains unclear, and it barely examines untalented fame or the undervaluing of genuine artists; frequent language errors further obscure the reasoning. Prioritise a direct position and one concrete example comparing popularity with artistic merit.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses talent in the arts but only partially engages with the claim about fame and the lack of appreciation for genuine ability.
State clear agreement or disagreement and develop a specific case showing whether commercial fame can displace genuine artistic talent.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has basic paragraphing, but progression is weakened by repeated connectors, loosely related solutions, and an unclear conclusion.
Organise one paragraph around artistic quality and another around fame and recognition, linking both directly to the position.
Lexical Resource
Some topic vocabulary is attempted, but frequent inaccurate choices and collocations make several ideas difficult to express precisely.
Replace phrases such as 'equal to be artists', 'quite interests', 'bucket of solutions', and 'talents searching events'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, verb patterns, plurals, articles, and clause construction cause noticeable strain for the reader.
Use shorter complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then check noun agreement and infinitive patterns carefully.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?
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