The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more?
Sample Response
People these days travel around the world for numerous purposes, and hence the number of flights is on the rise. But having the flights have both advantages and disadvantages as well. I will discuss the issue briefly in the following paragraphs and show my opinion whether imposing more taxes should be implemented or not. First of all, people take flights for some of the specific reasons. Speed is the key advantage here. It is only the air travel which provides the maximum speed and thus the travellers can save their valuable times. Besides, Comfort is another aspect of flights. When you will be on board on an aeroplane, you will feel comfortable like your own home. Further, when someone is on air, they are able to enjoy the attractive view of the ground which is a completely different experience. In opposite, there are some disadvantages have been found for the flights as well. Price is an important matter to consider. Often the prices of air tickets are higher and everyone is unable to bear such expensive tickets. Besides, some of the airliners charge for the snacks and meals or waters they serve during the trip. Sometimes, the journeys are tiresome as well and people suffer from jetlag. Place crash is a shocking issue for the passengers as there are fewer chances to survive a plane crash. Taxation on tickets is moderate now and I have experienced that recently. A couple of weeks ago, I travelled to New York from Massachusetts by a local airliner. They charged me 15% tax of the entire ticket value. So, I think this is moderate and if the tax is increased, it would be difficult for ordinary people like us to have the air travels in our need. To conclude, I think that the advantages of flights are more than disadvantages it owns. So, people should take the chance of air travel considering its benefits.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove faulty gerund Original: having the flights have Suggested revision: flights have Why it matters: The sentence needs the plural noun 'flights' directly as the subject.
- 2. Fix passive construction Original: imposing more taxes should be implemented Suggested revision: higher taxes should be imposed Why it matters: Taxes are imposed; the act of imposing them is not itself implemented.
- 3. Simplify cleft sentence Original: It is only the air travel which provides the maximum speed Suggested revision: Air travel provides the greatest speed Why it matters: The definite article is unnecessary, and 'greatest' is the natural superlative for speed.
- 4. Use uncountable time Original: times Suggested revision: time Why it matters: 'Time' is uncountable when referring to time saved generally.
- 5. Fix capitalization Original: Comfort Suggested revision: comfort Why it matters: The common noun after the introductory adverb should not be capitalized.
- 6. Fix time clause Original: When you will be on board on an aeroplane Suggested revision: When you are on board an aeroplane Why it matters: A present time clause uses 'are', and 'on board' takes no second 'on'.
- 7. Fix comparison form Original: comfortable like your own home Suggested revision: as comfortable as at home Why it matters: An equality comparison requires the 'as...as' structure.
- 8. Fix preposition Original: someone is on air Suggested revision: someone is in the air Why it matters: Passengers are 'in the air'; 'on air' refers to broadcasting.
- 9. Use contrast linker Original: In opposite Suggested revision: By contrast Why it matters: 'By contrast' is the standard transition to an opposing point.
- 10. Fix double predicate Original: there are some disadvantages have been found for the flights Suggested revision: flights also have some disadvantages Why it matters: The original clause incorrectly combines 'there are' with a second finite verb.
- 11. Remove incomplete comparison Original: prices of air tickets are higher Suggested revision: airfares are high Why it matters: 'Higher' requires an explicit comparison, while 'high' states the intended cost directly.
- 12. Fix negative scope Original: everyone is unable to bear Suggested revision: not everyone can afford Why it matters: The intended claim concerns some people, while 'everyone is unable' means nobody can pay.
Suggested Rewrites
- having the flights have flights have
- imposing more taxes should be implemented higher taxes should be imposed
- It is only the air travel which provides the maximum speed Air travel provides the greatest speed
- times time
- Comfort comfort
- When you will be on board on an aeroplane When you are on board an aeroplane
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response answers every part of the task and gives a clear view on taxation, supported by recognisable advantages and disadvantages of flying. However, the ideas are presented in one continuous block, several points are only briefly explained, and frequent language errors weaken clarity and precision. The highest priority is to build distinct paragraphs around developed main ideas, then revise sentence structures and collocations for accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
All questions are addressed and the position on higher taxes is clear, but several advantages and disadvantages receive limited or superficial development.
Develop fewer, more significant points by explaining their consequences and supporting each with a relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a recognisable sequence, but the absence of paragraph breaks and reliance on mechanical transitions weaken organisation and readability.
Separate the introduction, advantages, disadvantages, taxation view, and conclusion into clearly focused paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to discuss the topic, but frequent awkward word choices, collocations, and form errors limit precision.
Replace phrases such as valuable times, in opposite, and have the air travels in our need with natural, concise alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts both simple and complex structures, but frequent errors in clause formation, articles, agreement, and tense are noticeable throughout.
Construct complete subject-verb clauses first, then check articles and verb forms before adding subordinate ideas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more?
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