These days noise and air pollution are serious environmental problems. Some people think that air travel is to be blamed. Others believe that we should reduce the number of vehicles on the roads. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
With the increasing population and industrialisation, the level of air and noise pollution is increasing faster than ever before and these two forms of pollutions are some serious threats for all of us. There are many reasons why these pollutions are increasing faster than ever before while air travel and an increasing number of vehicles on the roads are two main reasons for that. I think the restriction on both, air travel and car ownership, is necessary to control the noise and air pollution.
The number of flights around the globe is overwhelming. A busy airport gets multiple air landing and departure every minute and air travels have already gained huge popularity among business people and tourists. Moreover, the cheap air travel has increased the number of people who travel in the air than the past. But apart from looking at the convenience, the air travel has brought to us, we need to consider the pollutions these aeroplanes are causing. The amount of air pollution caused by a single flight is unimaginable. Since we live in a global era, banning air travel is not possible and international trade and communication mostly rely on air transportations. So a thoughtful decision should be taken and the number of domestic flights should be restricted as people can easily make the journey using other transportation systems. The luxury air travel like going on holiday tours or visiting relatives should be restricted. Alternative sources of aeroplane fuel that would cause less pollution should be researched and introduced.
On the other hand, the number of cars running on roads is rising rapidly. The pollutions these cars are causing is unbelievable. The restriction on owning more than one car, promoting public transportation system and imposing heavy taxes on car ownership could be some very effective measures to reduce the pollutions. Hundreds of thousands of cars are running on roads in a big city and each one of them are emitting dangerous gases that contributes to the Green House Effect and pollute the air and environment. The noise pollution is increasing rapidly and affecting the children as well as adults in many harmful ways.
In conclusion, aeroplanes and vehicles running on roads are both responsible for the environmental damage and pollution and hence restriction on both should be imposed in a way so that the pollutions could be reduced to a great extent.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use uncountable pollution Original: pollutions Suggested revision: pollution Why it matters: Pollution is uncountable when referring generally to air and noise pollution.
- 2. Use correct preposition Original: for Suggested revision: to Why it matters: Threat takes the preposition to when identifying those endangered.
- 3. Use pollution types Original: these pollutions Suggested revision: these types of pollution Why it matters: Pollution is uncountable, so types of pollution expresses the plural meaning.
- 4. Use precise cause noun Original: two main reasons for that Suggested revision: two main causes Why it matters: Causes expresses the relationship more directly and removes the vague reference that.
- 5. Fix coordination punctuation Original: the restriction on both, air travel and car ownership, Suggested revision: restrictions on both air travel and car ownership Why it matters: The plural noun matches two restrictions, and commas should not separate both from its coordinated objects.
- 6. Use plural event nouns Original: air landing and departure Suggested revision: landings and departures Why it matters: Multiple events every minute require plural countable nouns.
- 7. Use uncountable travel Original: air travels have Suggested revision: air travel has Why it matters: Air travel is uncountable and takes a singular verb.
- 8. Remove unnecessary article Original: the cheap air travel Suggested revision: cheap air travel Why it matters: Air travel is used generally here and does not take the definite article.
- 9. Fix comparison structure Original: who travel in the air than the past Suggested revision: who travel by air compared with the past Why it matters: The revision uses the correct travel collocation and a complete comparison.
- 10. Fix relative clause Original: the convenience, the air travel has brought to us, Suggested revision: the convenience that air travel has brought us, Why it matters: That introduces the defining clause, while the internal comma incorrectly separates the noun from its modifier.
- 11. Use uncountable pollution Original: pollutions Suggested revision: pollution Why it matters: Pollution is uncountable in this general reference.
- 12. Use uncountable transport Original: transportations Suggested revision: transport Why it matters: Transport is uncountable when referring to the mode of travel.
Suggested Rewrites
- pollutions pollution
- for to
- these pollutions these types of pollution
- two main reasons for that two main causes
- the restriction on both, air travel and car ownership, restrictions on both air travel and car ownership
- air landing and departure landings and departures
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay fully engages with both proposed sources of pollution and maintains a clear position that restrictions should target air travel and road vehicles, with especially detailed consideration of practical aviation measures. Its main weakness is language accuracy, as repeated plural, agreement, and collocational errors reduce polish despite clear meaning. Refine the vehicle discussion with stronger evidence and proofread terminology and sentence agreement throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
Both views are directly discussed, the opinion is consistent, and practical measures are developed, although the road-vehicle case is less fully explained than the aviation case.
Strengthen the second view by explaining how fewer road vehicles would reduce both emissions and noise, supported by one concrete urban example.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing and a logical discussion of aviation followed by road traffic create strong progression, though some repetition and lengthy sentences reduce efficiency.
Trim repeated references to pollution and give each paragraph a sharper topic sentence followed by cause, effect, and proposed response.
Lexical Resource
The essay uses a broad range of environmental and transport vocabulary, but recurring plural forms and awkward collocations reduce lexical accuracy.
Use pollution as an uncountable noun and prefer standard phrases such as aircraft movements, air travel, modes of transport, vehicle emissions, and greenhouse effect.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of complex structures is attempted successfully enough for clear communication, but agreement, article, noun-form, and clause errors recur.
Check agreement after collective and quantified subjects, and ensure relative clauses and coordinated verbs match the correct singular or plural noun.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
These days noise and air pollution are serious environmental problems. Some people think that air travel is to be blamed. Others believe that we should reduce the number of vehicles on the roads. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
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