The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

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Sample Response

Nuclear power is an innovation of the modern science. It is the key source of nuclear weapons. Nuclear technology can be used for our benefits as the natural resources are limited and being exhausted every second. It can be the most efficient alternative to fuel, electricity, and other types of energy. But yet nuclear weapons are a threat to our existence and single misuse of this giant power can destroy our civilisation.

Many of the first world countries have achieved the nuclear power and have become a superpower. It can initially seem that mono-polarization of nuclear power preserves world peace but the idea is not agreeable always. The present world is not in a position where powerful countries will shout at weaker and the peace will prevail. The reality is we notice lots of suicide bombing attack and the hatred; the wrath of the people is so acute that they won't even think about the existence of our civilisation. To maintain peace there must be a peaceful way. Anger, Power threat and domination can't keep the peace in the worlds. So I disagree with the statement that nuclear weapon can maintain the world peace and far-weight the disadvantages but I do agree with the idea that nuclear power can be a great source of cheap energy. It is very much true that nuclear power is an alternative and perhaps the most efficient source of energy during these days of the energy crisis. Unlike other natural resources such as petroleum or gas, it is highly effective for industrial, transportation and other purposes and it is pollution free. As it is limitless, there is no question of its being used up like other natural resources like natural gas. Moreover, to control the over-increasing environmental pollution we have to use this technology in every applicable field. One day we all will be bound to use nuclear power to continue our life when there won't be any natural gas, fuels at all. However, this power is not available to all walks of life. Even it is absent in many countries who are searching for an alternative energy source. Only a few countries can produce it and unfortunately they are very strict to conceal their technology. Without having easy-access, a source of energy can not be a good one. Besides nuclear power needs the utmost and very careful handling, in the case of any indulgence, or any misuse can cause a huge loss of life and property. For instance, Chernobyl Nuclear Plant hazard affected a huge loss of lives. The balance of ecosystem was completely disturbed and even now, after this long time, people are affected by the nuclear side-effects. This is one but not the only incidence of radioactivity and we must be cautious about what might happen in future. In addition, nuclear power tends superpower to dominate others. It has become general that a superpower can easily attack a weak nation with any lame cause but negotiate with superpowers. But this is not going to be the common scenario always. In conclusion, the nuclear power can be used for our benefit or even for destruction. This totally depends on the ideology, humanity and our well-thinking. So we must use it for our betterment, not for our destruction.

IELTS Writing Correction

  • 1. Remove unnecessary article Original: the modern science Suggested revision: modern science Why it matters: Science is used generally here and does not take the definite article.
  • 2. Use singular expression Original: benefits Suggested revision: benefit Why it matters: For our benefit is the standard expression in this context.
  • 3. Remove unnecessary article Original: the natural resources Suggested revision: natural resources Why it matters: The plural noun refers to resources generally, so the article is unnecessary.
  • 4. Add finite verb Original: and being exhausted Suggested revision: and are being exhausted Why it matters: The coordinated clause needs the auxiliary verb are.
  • 5. Avoid double contrast Original: But yet Suggested revision: Yet Why it matters: But and yet duplicate the same contrastive function.
  • 6. Add missing article Original: and single misuse Suggested revision: and a single misuse Why it matters: The singular countable noun misuse requires an article.
  • 7. Use precise term Original: first world countries Suggested revision: developed countries Why it matters: Developed countries is a clearer and more conventional term here.
  • 8. Correct word partnership Original: achieved the nuclear power Suggested revision: acquired nuclear capability Why it matters: Countries acquire a capability rather than achieve nuclear power.
  • 9. Match plural subject Original: have become a superpower Suggested revision: have become superpowers Why it matters: The complement must be plural because it refers to many countries.
  • 10. Use natural phrasing Original: not agreeable always Suggested revision: not always convincing Why it matters: Convincing accurately describes an idea that the writer does not accept.
  • 11. Use plural noun Original: attack Suggested revision: attacks Why it matters: Lots of requires a plural countable noun.
  • 12. Remove unnecessary article Original: the hatred Suggested revision: hatred Why it matters: Hatred is used as a general uncountable concept here.

Suggested Rewrites

  • the modern science modern science
  • benefits benefit
  • the natural resources natural resources
  • and being exhausted and are being exhausted
  • But yet Yet
  • and single misuse and a single misuse
Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response shows broad engagement with both nuclear weapons and nuclear energy, offering several relevant points and an extended Chernobyl example. Its main limitation is that the argument becomes repetitive and the overall stance on whether the benefits outweigh the disadvantages remains insufficiently precise, while frequent awkward phrasing weakens authority. Prioritise a direct thesis and conclusion that answer the exact proposition, supported by fewer, better-organised claims.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.0
Scoring rule

The response discusses peaceful deterrence, energy benefits, access, safety, and domination, but its position on whether benefits outweigh disadvantages is not consistently explicit.

Next step

State a precise overall judgement in the introduction and conclusion, then develop each main reason with focused support.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5
Scoring rule

Ideas generally move from deterrence to energy benefits and risks, although the very long central paragraph, repetition, and loose transitions weaken progression.

Next step

Divide the argument into focused paragraphs and remove repeated claims so each section advances one clear point.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

There is enough vocabulary to discuss energy, conflict, pollution, and safety, but inaccurate collocations and word forms occur regularly.

Next step

Choose natural academic combinations and check expressions such as outweigh, access to energy, negligence, and loss of life.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5
Scoring rule

A range of sentence forms is attempted and meaning is usually recoverable, but frequent article, agreement, preposition, and clause errors reduce control.

Next step

Proofread complex sentences for complete clause structure, accurate agreement, and correct article and preposition use.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

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