You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisation. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you are going to do work experience. In your letter: - thank the manager for the opportunity to work experience - explain what you hope to learn from the work experience - ask some questions about the work experience you are going to do

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam,

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I am writing to express my sincere gratitude for the opportunity to complete a three-month work placementundertake a three-month work experience placement withat your organisation. I greatly appreciate the privilegeIt is a privilege to gain practical experience in your professional environmentsuch a professional environment, and I am eager to contribute effectively and learn as much as possiblecontribute and learn as much as possible during my time with you.

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Through this placement, I hope to develop a betterdeeper understanding of professional practices in your fieldindustry practices and enhance my technical and interpersonal skills. Specifically, I am keen to understandkeen to gain insight into how your organisation operates on a daily basis and how different departments collaborate to achieve business objectives. Additionally, I am eager to learn from experienced professionals and apply my academic knowledge to real-world scenarios.

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Before my placement begins, I would appreciate it if you could provide some information regarding my daily responsibilities, working hours, and the team I will be working with. Additionally, are there any specific materials or documents I should review beforehand?

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I look forward to your response and to starting this exciting opportunity.

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Yours faithfully,

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Ada Margaret

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 9.0

The letter fully addresses the purpose in an appropriately formal tone, with clearly developed learning goals and focused questions arranged in a smooth progression. Its main limitation is minor repetition of words such as experience, eager, and additionally, which slightly reduces stylistic variety. The best improvement would be to vary these expressions and make one or two questions even more specific to the placement.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

9.0
Scoring rule

The letter fully and directly covers the thanks, intended learning outcomes, and relevant questions in a consistently suitable formal register.

Next step

For even greater specificity, ask one question tied to the organisation's particular field or likely projects.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.5
Scoring rule

Purposeful paragraphs and well-managed linking create a clear, effortless progression from gratitude to goals and practical questions.

Next step

Vary the repeated transition additionally to make the already strong flow still more natural.

LR

Lexical Resource

8.5
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is broad, precise, and professional, with effective phrases for workplace learning and organisational practice.

Next step

Reduce repetition of experience and eager by using selective paraphrase where it sounds natural.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

9.0
Scoring rule

A wide range of complex structures is used accurately and flexibly, with consistently controlled punctuation and sentence formation.

Next step

Maintain this high level of control while experimenting with slightly more varied sentence openings.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisation. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you are going to do work experience. In your letter:

- thank the manager for the opportunity to work experience

- explain what you hope to learn from the work experience

- ask some questions about the work experience you are going to do

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