In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?
Sample Response
The present age is fast paced and marked bywith the advancement of science and technology. As a result, we are becoming more like machines than humansturning into machines than human and that is resulting in a limited relationship even with the next-door neighboursnext door neighbours. Now, the relationship among neighbours is more distant than in the pastdismal than the past. This essay delves into the reasons for this distant relationship among neighbours and some ways to improve it. First of all, people, these days, lack leisure timelack their leisure hours. They are unable to find timearrange times for socialising. In fact, they haveare to follow the strict routines, execute theirrespective occupational duties, and if someone fails, survival turns challenging for them. So, people cannot manage extra hours to spendspent with neighbours. As a result, relationshipsAs a result relationship among people declines. On the contraryOn contrary, often people do lack the sense of consideration. They seem to have less care for others. For instance, I have a neighbour in my next flat who is a singer and works in a local bandwork at a local band. So, when he starts practising in the middle of the night, it is really irritating for me. I have notified the issue several times to him but that was of no use. So, I decided not to socialise with him anymore as his inconsiderate behaviourirrational behave developed an unpleasant feeling inside me about him. Similar scenariosThe similar scenarios are found randomly that is resulting in relationship decline. Actually, there are no specific ways to improve the relationship with neighbours. I believe the application of common sense is enough towards a healthy relationship with neighbours. The most important matter about this – each of the people should be aware of their rights and responsibilities, and limitations. For instance, I am not responsible for caring for my neighbour’s dog on my lawn or home. Similarly, the neighbours should also be aware of such issues so that any of their attitudes or activities cause trouble for others. When everyone is awarewhen everyone will be aware of the issue, I think the relationship will come to a pleasant level.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response answers both questions and uses concrete examples to explain time pressure, inconsiderate behaviour, and the need for mutual responsibility. Its main weakness is presentation as one long paragraph, compounded by frequent grammatical and collocational errors that make parts of the argument less precise. The highest priority is to divide the discussion into logical paragraphs and then revise recurring sentence-level errors while developing the proposed solutions more specifically.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant causes and a workable principle for improving neighbourly contact are presented, but the solutions are narrow and only partly developed into practical measures.
Offer two specific actions that neighbours or communities can take and explain how each would directly increase regular contact.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a recognisable sequence and uses linking expressions, but presenting the entire essay as one paragraph weakens organisation and makes progression harder to follow.
Separate the introduction, causes, solutions, and conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with one central function each.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary to discuss social relationships and responsibility, but frequent awkward collocations and incorrect word forms limit precision.
Replace expressions such as dismal than the past, arrange times, and irrational behave with accurate comparative forms and natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures and remains generally understandable, although errors in agreement, articles, infinitives, comparison, and conditionals recur throughout.
Systematically proofread subject-verb agreement and verb forms, then check that comparisons and conditional clauses use complete, accurate structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?
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