Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
A group of people believe that paying taxes is the greatest contribution citizens makethe biggest contribution by citizens and those taxpayers are already making enough of a contributionenough contribution to be exempted from other duties to society. However, others opine that paying taxes does not automatically exemptspare citizens from other obligations and moral duties. This essay discusses both views; however,This essay discusses both views, however, I believe that all citizens have to fulfil their social responsibilitiesabide by their social responsibilities while capable members must pay taxes. On the one hand, tax money helps the governmentauthority run public servicesrun the public service, pay salaries to government employees, take new development initiatives, fund researchresearch works, and provide subsidiesoffer subsidiaries to important sectors. So this money essentially helps run the country. Without the taxpayers' money, for example, the price of commodities will go up; no new roads would be builtthe price of commodities will go up, no new roads would be built, education and medical treatment would be expensive. So it is understandable that a taxpayer is contributing to the smooth running of the countryto smoothly run the country and should be offered some more benefits than non-taxpayersbenefits than non-taxpayers, and if required, they should be excused from other social responsibilities. On the other hand, it is undeniable that taxpayers are also benefiting from the money they are paying and should not be relieved of their other dutiesreleased from their other duties. Just paying tax should not allow someone to be above the law. These taxpayers should follow rules and also act virtuously to keep society on track. Besides, they have moral duties to people around them due to their financiallyfinancial well-off status. For instance, the highest taxpayers in society are usually the most powerful and financially successful persons, and due to their social influenceinfluences, they have even more responsibilities to help needy people and take initiatives to save the environment and make the area a better place to live in. In conclusion, paying tax is important, but it does not automatically excuse them from obeying social rules, helping needy people and performing moral duties. It is expected that taxpayers would take on more responsibilitiestake more responsibilities in society to make it even better.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response addresses both perspectives, maintains a clear opinion, and supports its position with relevant explanations and examples. Its main limitation is that several claims in the first view are somewhat sweeping, while recurring awkward collocations and grammatical lapses reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to develop the case for excusing taxpayers from other duties more convincingly and express those ideas in more natural, accurately controlled language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are discussed and the writer's position is clear throughout, with relevant support despite some overgeneralised reasoning in the first argument.
Explain more precisely why paying tax might justify reduced social obligations, using a carefully qualified example rather than broad assertions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay progresses logically through the two views to a consistent conclusion, and its paragraphing and referencing generally support clarity.
Strengthen the transitions within the first body paragraph so that the examples lead more explicitly to the claim about exemption from other duties.
Lexical Resource
A good range of topic-specific vocabulary conveys the argument clearly, but several inaccurate or awkward combinations reduce precision.
Replace expressions such as 'offer subsidiaries,' 'benefits than,' and 'financial well-off status' with accurate, idiomatic collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures successfully, although agreement, article, comparison, and conditional errors recur without obscuring meaning.
Proofread longer sentences for consistent verb forms, articles, and comparison structures, especially when combining examples and conclusions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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