Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
One can safely assume that in every learning environment there is at least one student who is boisterous and has behavioural problems. Some people are of the opinion that they can have a negative impact on their classmatescolleagues. Grouping them togetherPutting them all together in a group is an effective way to create a conducive learning environment. However, regarding this proposalapropos of the statement, I am completely opposed to itin consummate discord with it. The bases for my opinion are psychological and academic. From a psychological viewpoint, it is widely believedspread that students who do not receive sufficient attention at home are more prone to behavioural problemsmore prone to bad behavioural problem than those who do. As a result, they will use anyall means possible, including behaving badly to gainnamely behaving badly to obtain the much-needed attention from their teachers. Thus, grouping students with disruptive tendencies together is not the most appropriate solution as it will only make them feel even more ostracisedfeel more ostracised. From an academic point of view, putting disobedient students in one class will only limit their educational opportunities and discourage them furtherfurther discourage the students. It will be hard for the teachers to educate the students when every student is disruptive; as a resultwhen they are all disobedient and at the end of the day, nothing will get done. It appears that teaching the students togethercombining the students, regardless of whether or not they arethey're rebellious, would be a more effective solutionwill serve as a more effective solution. On the one hand, teachers will have an easier time managing the studentscontrolling the student and figuring out what measures to take with each student. On the other hand, having a well-behavedbehaving and intelligent student in the class will serve as a role model for the disobedient students. Consequently, disobedient students will somehow feel compelled to emulate the role model and change for the better.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear disagreement and develops relevant psychological and academic reasons, with a practical alternative that keeps the argument focused. Its main weakness is presentation and language control: the essay is not divided into paragraphs, and several ambitious phrases sound unnatural or imprecise. Prioritise clear paragraphing and more idiomatic word combinations while retaining the strong line of reasoning.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is sustained and supported with relevant psychological and academic arguments plus an alternative approach.
Develop the proposed mixed-class solution more critically and close with an explicit synthesis of the position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses logically through distinct reasons, but the complete absence of paragraph breaks weakens organisation.
Separate the introduction, each main reason, the alternative solution, and the conclusion into purposeful paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and sometimes sophisticated, although several choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise.
Prefer idiomatic combinations such as behavioural problems and strongly disagree over unnecessarily ornate or awkward expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures communicates meaning clearly, with recurring but non-impeding errors in agreement, articles, and noun forms.
Proofread noun phrases and agreement carefully, especially plural forms and references such as student versus students.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
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