As we are facing more and more problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before.
Sample Response
The concepts of countries, territories and bordersThe concept of country, territory and dividing area were created by humanswere made by human over the centuriesthroughout the ages but planet Earththe mother planet Earth is a single entity and if it faces a problem, the whole world would be affected by itaffected from that. The world is facing more problems, both human-created and natural, thanthat ever and if the world can’t unitestand in a single ground to work towards the betterment of the world we would not survive for longfor a long. In my opinion, countries must work togetherthe countries must work together to make the world a better place to live in.
First of all, the unity among the countries of the world has become more important than ever. Without strong relationshipsthe concrete relationship and the mentality to work together, the world would turn out to be a very difficult place to live in. While one nation has abundant natural resourcesthe abundance of natural resource and luxury to live a lavish life, others are suffering from very basic problems like foodfoods, power supply and that’s inhuman to let it happen. The relationship among countries is important to maintain peacemaintain the peace throughout the world. We have never been attacked by aliensthe Aliens and it was us who killed millions of people in the World Wars. We dropped atom bombs to kill innocent peoplethe innocent people only because they were ruled by a different government who had a different policy. If we continue to let it happen, countries would start more devastating fights against each other and that would be threatening for the whole world.
The problems the mother earth is facing like floods, earthquakes and rising average temperaturesflood, earthquake and average temperature increase are not the problems for a single country. It is a problem for all the nations and they should work together to face it.
The countries of the world have volatile economic structure nowadays and no country can guarantee a solid economic stability for the coming ages. The only solution to the survival of nations is to work hands on hands. The poor nations who are deprived of many basic needs would become an enemy of the neighbouring country who has better life standard and thus more terrorist would emerge. To solve this problem, the rich countries should help increase the economic conditions of those poor countries.
In conclusion, I repeat the well-known proverb ‘United we stand, Divided we fall.’ This is true for our world as well since we don’t know what difficulties are coming to attack us and we must work together to face it and to survive.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear position and offers several relevant reasons for international cooperation, with the discussion of peace and shared global problems providing its strongest support. However, some claims are generalized or only briefly explained, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision; the priority is to develop fewer ideas more rigorously while revising agreement, reference, and word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A consistent position is supported through relevant arguments about peace, global threats, and economic inequality, though development is uneven and sometimes generalized.
Select the strongest two reasons and extend each with a precise causal explanation and a credible, specific example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay progresses logically from its position through several supporting themes, but one very short paragraph and some repetition weaken the balance of the structure.
Combine the brief environmental point with fuller explanation and give each body paragraph a clearly developed central idea.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic with some range, but frequent unnatural combinations and imprecise choices reduce clarity and control.
Use standard collocations such as 'stand together,' 'work hand in hand,' and 'raise living standards,' and check noun forms carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex sentences are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals, prepositions, and reference remain noticeable.
Prioritize subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference, then proofread complex sentences for complete and accurately connected clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
As we are facing more and more problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before.
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