The advantage of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Presently, English is called a universal language as half of the world population is using it. It is the gateway to the world, the ability to speak in English is considered as one of the hallmarks of a cultured person. It is undeniable to say that, global language has resulted in both positive and negative effects which must be addressed accordingly.
To begin with, there are many benefits of extending a universal language. Through global language, a particular country can develop its business relations and increase its economic growth. Professionally, in today's globalised world, those who are fluent in English have a competitive advantage over other candidates.
From the social perspective, the English language allows people to enter a wider cultural world, which helps in developing healthy relations among them. This critical ability is building a foundation for good business and social relations. The widespread use of the English language is narrowing the gap between communication and people all over the world have accepted English as a language to use for communications. The books, history and research papers written in this language are really great in number and the spread of this language has made it possible to let people around the world learn the same technology and resources. However, one can not deny the drawbacks which are derived from global language. Adopting universal language is leading to westernisation of culture. Nowadays, people speak global language instead of their own language. As a result, they are forgetting their indigenous dialects and culture and their children are following the same. For example, Bangladesh is well-known for its culture and traditions all over the world, but, presently, many people have forgotten their culture and language. In conclusion, I would argue that benefits created by the English language far outweigh the disadvantages of it and in future English would be spoken by far many people and would decrease the language barrier nations have.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove preposition Original: considered as one Suggested revision: considered one Why it matters: 'Considered' takes a direct complement in this construction.
- 2. Simplify construction Original: It is undeniable to say that, Suggested revision: It is undeniable that Why it matters: The infinitive and comma make this clause ungrammatical and redundant.
- 3. Use accurate verb Original: extending Suggested revision: adopting Why it matters: A language is adopted or spread; 'extending' is unnatural in this context.
- 4. Add article Original: Through global language Suggested revision: Through a global language Why it matters: The singular countable noun requires an article.
- 5. Clarify pronoun Original: relations among them Suggested revision: relations among people from different cultures Why it matters: 'Them' has no clear plural antecedent in the sentence.
- 6. Use simple present Original: is building a foundation Suggested revision: builds a foundation Why it matters: The simple present is more suitable for a general effect.
- 7. Fix collocation Original: gap between communication and people Suggested revision: communication gap between people Why it matters: The original phrase incorrectly treats communication and people as opposite sides of a gap.
- 8. Use concise phrase Original: language to use for communications Suggested revision: language for communication Why it matters: 'Communication' is normally uncountable here, and the infinitive is unnecessary.
- 9. Use formal wording Original: really great in number Suggested revision: very numerous Why it matters: The replacement is more concise and appropriately formal.
- 10. Clarify meaning Original: let people around the world learn the same technology and resources Suggested revision: allow people around the world to access the same technical knowledge and resources Why it matters: People access knowledge and resources; they do not normally 'learn resources'.
- 11. Use parallel nouns Original: The books, history and research papers Suggested revision: Books, historical accounts and research papers Why it matters: 'History' names a field, while the other items name written works; 'historical accounts' restores parallel meaning.
- 12. Use natural phrase Original: drawbacks which are derived from global language Suggested revision: drawbacks of a global language Why it matters: The original passive expression is wordy and omits the required article.
Suggested Rewrites
- considered as one considered one
- It is undeniable to say that, It is undeniable that
- extending adopting
- Through global language Through a global language
- relations among them relations among people from different cultures
- is building a foundation builds a foundation
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response's strongest aspect is its relevant range of benefits, linking global English to trade, employment, cross-cultural communication and access to knowledge, before recognising the risk to local languages and cultures. The main limitation is that several claims are broad or repetitive and the opinion appears clearly only at the end, while paragraphing becomes uneven. Prioritise an explicit position in the introduction and a direct comparison explaining why the stated benefits outweigh cultural loss.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses advantages, a cultural disadvantage and the extent of agreement, but the position is delayed and several supporting claims remain general.
State the extent of agreement in the introduction and explicitly weigh communication and economic benefits against the risk of language and cultural loss.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow an understandable benefits-to-drawbacks sequence, but the short second paragraph and overloaded final paragraph create uneven progression and weak separation of functions.
Use distinct paragraphs for economic benefits, social and knowledge benefits, cultural disadvantages, and the final judgement.
Lexical Resource
There is a sufficient range of vocabulary for language, business and culture, though imprecise collocations and missing articles recur.
Prefer phrases such as 'the spread of a global language', 'reduce communication barriers', 'a large body of research' and 'preserve indigenous languages'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures communicates the argument, but comma splices, article errors, agreement problems and awkward clause combinations occur regularly.
Separate run-on sentences, especially the introduction and the communication paragraph, and check articles before singular countable nouns.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The advantage of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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