The advantage of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is true that the proliferation of the English language on an international scale is profoundly impacting many countries by benefiting underdeveloped nations’ businesses and tourism through globalisation and providing its people with a foundation for accessing the quality education available in developed countries. Although drawbacks existthe drawbacks do exist, the benefits are substantialbenefits are countless. I believe that the benefits of this trend are more significant thanhave more significance than its disadvantagesdemerits and this will continue in the coming years. The widespread useusage of a single language, English, in this caseEnglish in this case, attracts foreign investors and tourists from developed countries, promoting globalisationcountries; promoting globalisation, and it has both advantages and disadvantages. Firstly, national economies are strengthenedthe economy is improved through the profitable operations of multinational companiesprofitable businesses of multi-national companies. In addition to this, tourist arrivalsthe tourists’ arrivals increase due to the hospitality they enjoy when communicating in a common languagehospitality enjoyed when spoken to in a common language. Moreover, this influx increases government revenuethe government’s revenue generated from the hospitality industry. On the other hand, the promotion of international businesses can harm the growth of local businessesthe local business expansions. Furthermore, due to the increasing use of the English language, many local languages are receiving less attentionare getting less priority and thus impacting the cultural identity of many nations. English provides a solid foundation for people seeking quality education in developed countries and equips them to secure a high paying job in a multinational company. Firstly, it is the only medium of instructionmedium of teaching instruction in the world’s top universities; an active command of the language helps secure admissionsecures an admission to a university. Additionally, knowledgeTo add, knowledge of the language place candidates at an advantage in the job marketa step forward in the job hunting pool; the chances are high that candidates can secure their desired positionsthe desired position is earned. While the increasing usage of English attracts foreign businesses and tourists in underdeveloped nations, local businesses may be stifled, and local people may be disadvantagednatives may be undermined. However, the benefits it brings to these nations through globalisation, and their people by laying a foundation for quality education eclipse its drawbacks, which in my opinion, is a positive trend.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay presents a consistent view that the advantages will continue to prevail and covers economic, tourism, educational, employment, business, and cultural effects. Its main limitation is that several claims remain broad or unsupported, while the one-paragraph structure and frequent awkward constructions reduce clarity. Prioritise organising the argument into focused advantage and disadvantage paragraphs and explaining, with a concrete example, why the benefits are likely to remain greater in future.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and both advantages and disadvantages are relevant, but several reasons are asserted generally rather than fully explained or illustrated.
Develop one concrete example linking English to education or investment and explicitly explain why that benefit will continue to outweigh language loss.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows an understandable sequence, but the absence of paragraphing, repeated basic transitions, and loose sentence connections weaken organisation.
Use an introduction, separate economic and educational advantage paragraphs, a focused disadvantage paragraph, and a concise comparative conclusion.
Lexical Resource
There is a broad range of topic vocabulary, although frequent unnatural collocations and imprecise word choices reduce flexibility and accuracy.
Replace phrases such as ‘benefits are countless’, ‘tourists’ arrivals’, ‘getting less priority’, and ‘job hunting pool’ with idiomatic academic alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex forms are attempted throughout, but agreement, article, punctuation, participle, and clause-control errors occur frequently while meaning remains mostly clear.
Prioritise complete clause structures and subject–verb agreement, especially in ‘knowledge of the language places candidates’ and the semicolon-linked sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The advantage of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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