Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

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Sample Response

With the evolution of technological advancement, people’s interest in reading has dramatically reduced in some developing countries over the last few years. Some people argue that books having people autobiography, real stories and proven facts are more influential and have greater advantages. Others claim that people should encourage reading books irrespective of its type and category. I believe that reading is an important constituent of people’s lives and help them to increase their knowledge and information about various aspects of the worlds. There is no doubt that people’s observation and experiences in the form of books enable other people to draw their opinion on a particular thing, for instance, researchers are using established facts as a basis of their research to extract something new out of it as their finding. Furthermore, people can learn about various events of history that were important parts of their tradition and customs but are no longer practice in today’s world. Nowadays, people are more opted towards others activities than reading. Therefore, we should make attempts to create a conducive learning environment and motivate people to read books of their own choice. Parents and teachers can play a pivotal role in realising the importance of reading among children. In today’s competitive environment, individuals should focus to gain maximum knowledge and information on different subjects by reading books that cater multiple ideas and topics. To sum up, I would like to say that books have significant positive impact on people attitudes and behaviours. However, there is dire need to create perceptiveness about reading regardless of the type and subject of books. People should have freedom to select books based on their interest and liking.

IELTS Writing Correction

  • 1. Remove redundant phrase Original: With the evolution of technological advancement Suggested revision: With recent technological advances Why it matters: Evolution and advancement duplicate the same idea and form an unnatural opening.
  • 2. Use intransitive verb Original: has dramatically reduced Suggested revision: has declined dramatically Why it matters: Interest declines by itself, whereas reduce normally requires an object in this construction.
  • 3. Correct noun phrase Original: books having people autobiography Suggested revision: books containing people's autobiographies Why it matters: The replacement supplies the correct possessive and plural noun forms.
  • 4. Correct passive meaning Original: people should encourage reading books Suggested revision: people should be encouraged to read books Why it matters: The passive form is needed because people receive the encouragement.
  • 5. Match plural reference Original: irrespective of its type and category Suggested revision: irrespective of their type or category Why it matters: The pronoun must agree with the plural noun books.
  • 6. Use natural expression Original: constituent Suggested revision: part Why it matters: Part is the natural word for describing reading's role in people's lives.
  • 7. Fix verb agreement Original: help Suggested revision: helps Why it matters: The singular subject reading requires the singular verb helps.
  • 8. Use singular world Original: worlds Suggested revision: world Why it matters: The expression refers to the shared world in the singular.
  • 9. Match coordinated nouns Original: observation Suggested revision: observations Why it matters: The general reference requires the countable noun observation to be plural.
  • 10. Correct opinion collocation Original: draw their opinion on a particular thing Suggested revision: form opinions about particular issues Why it matters: People form opinions about issues rather than draw an opinion on a thing.
  • 11. Separate run-on clauses Original: , for instance, Suggested revision: . For instance, Why it matters: A full stop is needed because the example begins a new independent sentence.
  • 12. Correct preposition Original: of Suggested revision: for Why it matters: Basis takes the preposition for when it introduces a purpose or activity.

Suggested Rewrites

  • With the evolution of technological advancement With recent technological advances
  • has dramatically reduced has declined dramatically
  • books having people autobiography books containing people's autobiographies
  • people should encourage reading books people should be encouraged to read books
  • irrespective of its type and category irrespective of their type or category
  • constituent part
Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.5

The response maintains a discernible view that readers should be free to choose and uses some relevant discussion of learning from factual material. Its main weakness is that it only indirectly challenges the restriction to factual books, offering little explanation of the value of fiction or other categories, while frequent language errors and the single-paragraph structure reduce clarity. The priority is to organise distinct paragraphs around direct reasons against the claim and develop each with a specific example.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

5.5
Scoring rule

A relevant position is eventually clear, but the response focuses broadly on encouraging reading rather than fully explaining why readers should not be limited to factual books.

Next step

Give two direct reasons for valuing non-factual books, such as imagination and empathy, and support each with a specific example.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0
Scoring rule

The argument has a broadly identifiable direction, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph and using several run-on sentences weakens progression.

Next step

Separate the introduction, main reasons, and conclusion into clear paragraphs, with one central idea developed in each body paragraph.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

The response attempts a reasonably broad academic vocabulary, but inaccurate collocations and word choices repeatedly reduce precision.

Next step

Prioritise natural word combinations, replacing phrases such as create perceptiveness and cater multiple ideas with clear, idiomatic wording.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0
Scoring rule

A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent agreement, article, plural, and clause-boundary errors limit grammatical control.

Next step

Edit each sentence for subject-verb agreement and complete clause boundaries before adding more complex structures.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

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