You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter: - Explain why you have moved - Describe the new apartment - Invite him to pay a visit.
Sample Response
Dear John, Hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to let you know that we moved to a new place last month. There are a range of reasons behind moving to a new address. First of all, you know I have changed my job recently so the new job location was very far from my old address. It is now very convenient from my new home. Secondly, my parents come from Australia and will be living with us from now on. So, It became very difficult to accommodate 4 people in our old place. That’s why we needed to shift. You will be happy to see our new apartment.It is on the sixth floor of a ten story building. We have 2 master bedrooms and a small bedroom. In addition to that, It has 2 washrooms, a kitchen and a huge living room where we watch TV.I must not forget to say, my bedroom has a beautiful view of a park outside. Most importantly this apartment has a lot of open space that we love most. Last but not least, please pay as a visit anytime soon. We will love to see you here. I bet you will not regret the visit. Please let me know when you are coming. I will look forward to hearing from you. Yours, Sam
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix subject-verb agreement Original: are Suggested revision: is Why it matters: The singular head noun range requires the singular verb is.
- 2. Use natural collocation Original: behind moving to a new address Suggested revision: for moving house Why it matters: Reasons for moving house is a more natural expression in this context.
- 3. Use natural tense Original: have changed my job recently Suggested revision: recently changed jobs Why it matters: The simple past suits the completed job change, and changed jobs is the natural expression.
- 4. Choose precise noun Original: new job location Suggested revision: new workplace Why it matters: Workplace refers more naturally to the place where the writer works.
- 5. Show future arrival Original: my parents come from Australia Suggested revision: my parents are coming from Australia Why it matters: The present continuous correctly expresses their planned move from Australia.
- 6. Improve result link Original: So, It Suggested revision: As a result, it Why it matters: This connector clearly links the need for more space to the parents' arrival and fixes the capitalization.
- 7. Use natural verb Original: shift Suggested revision: move Why it matters: Move is the natural verb for changing homes in this letter.
- 8. Hyphenate compound adjective Original: ten story Suggested revision: ten-storey Why it matters: The compound adjective before building should be hyphenated.
- 9. Use concise connector Original: In addition to that Suggested revision: In addition Why it matters: The shorter connector links the apartment details more smoothly.
- 10. Lowercase mid-sentence word Original: It Suggested revision: it Why it matters: This clause follows a comma and should begin with a lowercase letter.
- 11. Use natural phrasing Original: I must not forget to say Suggested revision: I should also mention Why it matters: This wording introduces another apartment feature more naturally.
- 12. Add introductory comma Original: Most importantly this apartment Suggested revision: Most importantly, this apartment Why it matters: A comma is needed after the introductory linking phrase.
Suggested Rewrites
- are is
- behind moving to a new address for moving house
- have changed my job recently recently changed jobs
- new job location new workplace
- my parents come from Australia my parents are coming from Australia
- So, It As a result, it
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter has a clear purpose, develops convincing reasons for the move, and describes the new apartment in enough detail to make the invitation engaging. Its main weakness is presentation and language control: the single-block structure, mechanical sequencing, and recurring grammar and collocation errors reduce polish. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the three functions into distinct paragraphs and proofread each sentence for natural phrasing and accurate forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response clearly explains the job and family reasons for moving, describes the apartment extensively, and warmly invites John to visit.
Make the invitation more concrete by suggesting a possible date or weekend while retaining the friendly tone.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a clear functional sequence, and signposting such as 'First of all' and 'Secondly' makes the progression easy to follow.
Use separate paragraphs for the move, the apartment, and the invitation, and rely less on formulaic sequencing phrases.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range to discuss location, accommodation, and the visit, but several word combinations are imprecise or unnatural.
Refine collocations such as 'convenient from my new home,' 'open space that we love most,' and 'pay as a visit.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer uses both simple and complex sentences, while recurring errors in tense, articles, capitalization, agreement, and punctuation remain noticeable.
Proofread sentence boundaries and verb forms, including spacing after full stops and the distinction between past events and current circumstances.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter:
- Explain why you have moved
- Describe the new apartment
- Invite him to pay a visit.
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