You have recently migrated to another country. Now write a letter to your friend to describe your present life. In your letter, say: when you have moved to this country why you chose this country how things are now for you
Sample Response
Dear Lee, Hope you and your family are doing fine. I'm sorry that I couldn’t get back to you with an update from my end earlier after moving to Australia about a month ago, but that’s so because I was terribly busy with getting my things organized after moving to this new country. Anyway, now I am all set with my new life and trying to adapt to the new environment and conditions of this new country slowly. Of course, it will take a bit longer for me to understand the life and culture, but people are charming and friendly here. The place, where I live now, is a small town but it is certainly a beautiful place with lots of trees and beautiful landscape. So, I guess, you can say that I am enjoying my time here. By the way, in case if you were wondering, I decided to move to Australia because the profession and skills I have are in high demand here. I am expecting to work in Australia for at least 10 years. That should do it for now, but I sure would like to get back to you with some more updates soon. Warm wishes, Ghim
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add subject Original: Dear Lee, Hope you Suggested revision: Dear Lee, I hope you Why it matters: Add “I” after the greeting.
- 2. Natural phrase Original: from my end Suggested revision: from me Why it matters: This is simpler and more natural.
- 3. Gerund phrase Original: busy with getting Suggested revision: busy getting Why it matters: “Busy” is followed directly by -ing.
- 4. Natural collocation Original: organized after moving Suggested revision: settled after moving Why it matters: “Settled” fits relocation better.
- 5. Reduce repetition Original: this new country Suggested revision: Australia Why it matters: Naming the country avoids repetition.
- 6. Natural phrase Original: all set with my new life Suggested revision: settled into my new life Why it matters: This is the standard expression.
- 7. Natural wording Original: conditions of this new country Suggested revision: way of life here Why it matters: This sounds more conversational.
- 8. Article needed Original: people are charming and friendly here Suggested revision: the people are charming and friendly here Why it matters: Use “the people” for residents generally.
- 9. Remove commas Original: The place, where I live now, Suggested revision: The place where I live now Why it matters: Do not comma off a defining clause.
- 10. Natural noun Original: beautiful landscape Suggested revision: beautiful scenery Why it matters: “Scenery” is more idiomatic here.
- 11. Cleaner link Original: So, I guess, Suggested revision: So I guess Why it matters: The commas interrupt the phrase.
- 12. Fixed phrase Original: in case if you were wondering Suggested revision: in case you were wondering Why it matters: Do not use “if” after “in case”.
Suggested Rewrites
- Dear Lee, Hope you Dear Lee, I hope you
- from my end from me
- busy with getting busy getting
- organized after moving settled after moving
- this new country Australia
- all set with my new life settled into my new life
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter answers when the move happened, why Australia was chosen, and how life is now. More current-life detail would make it stronger.
Keep the relevant content, then revise the wording and organisation points highlighted in the essay comments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Progression is clear, but everything is in one block and some links are casual or repetitive.
Use clearer paragraphing and smoother links so each bullet point is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is flexible, but phrases like “from my end” and repeated “new country” sound unnatural.
Prefer natural collocations and precise topic vocabulary over overformal or translated-sounding phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is mostly clear, with weaknesses in long sentences, articles and fixed expressions.
Proofread tense, articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries before submitting.