You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter: - Explain why you have moved - Describe the new apartment - Invite him to pay a visit.
Sample Response
Dear Baljeet, With all my excitement, I would like to tell you that I have shifted to a new accommodation in Saket. I moved here last weekend during auspicious time of Navratra. The reason for change was the long travelling hours from my last accommodation to my office. As you already know that I recently changed my work location to Delhi and the long travelling hours would leave me tired for whole day. With this new change I am saving almost 2 hours daily. My new paradise is a 2 bedroom apartment facing park. Its well-connected by metro and has a Select city walk mall just 2 km away. The place is well furnished and has really good ventilation, something I always look out for. I would like you to plan a visit someday to my new place. We can also plan a pajama party to revisit our old good memories. Hope to see you soon. Waiting eagerly for your visit. Bhawna Sharma
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural opening Original: With all my excitement Suggested revision: I'm very excited Why it matters: This wording expresses enthusiasm more naturally in a letter to a friend.
- 2. Use natural collocation Original: shifted to a new accommodation Suggested revision: moved to a new apartment Why it matters: “Moved to a new apartment” is the natural phrase for changing homes.
- 3. Add article and noun Original: during auspicious time of Navratra Suggested revision: during the auspicious festival of Navratra Why it matters: The phrase needs an article and a clear noun to be grammatically complete.
- 4. Add definite article Original: reason for change Suggested revision: reason for the change Why it matters: Use “the” because the letter refers to the specific change of home.
- 5. Use commute wording Original: travelling hours from my last accommodation Suggested revision: commute from my previous home Why it matters: “Commute” precisely describes regular travel between home and work.
- 6. Remove incorrect that Original: As you already know that Suggested revision: As you already know, Why it matters: The introductory clause “As you already know” should be followed by a comma, not “that.”
- 7. Clarify job location Original: changed my work location to Delhi Suggested revision: started working in Delhi Why it matters: This wording communicates the change of workplace more directly.
- 8. Correct tense and article Original: the long travelling hours would leave me tired for whole day Suggested revision: the long commute left me tired for the whole day Why it matters: The past-tense account requires “left,” and “whole day” needs the definite article.
- 9. Avoid redundant wording Original: With this new change Suggested revision: With this move Why it matters: “New change” is redundant, while “this move” refers precisely to the relocation.
- 10. Use natural time phrase Original: 2 hours daily Suggested revision: two hours each day Why it matters: Spelling out the number and using “each day” suits the prose style of the letter.
- 11. Hyphenate compound adjective Original: a 2 bedroom apartment Suggested revision: a two-bedroom apartment Why it matters: The compound modifier before “apartment” requires a hyphen.
- 12. Add article and precision Original: facing park Suggested revision: overlooking a park Why it matters: “Overlooking a park” is the natural phrase and supplies the required article.
Suggested Rewrites
- With all my excitement I'm very excited
- shifted to a new accommodation moved to a new apartment
- during auspicious time of Navratra during the auspicious festival of Navratra
- reason for change reason for the change
- travelling hours from my last accommodation commute from my previous home
- As you already know that As you already know,
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter fully covers the reason for moving, describes the new apartment with relevant detail, and extends a warm invitation in a friendly, engaging tone. Its main weakness is recurring awkward phrasing and article or clause errors, which occasionally make the language sound less natural despite clear meaning. Focus first on more idiomatic collocations and accurate sentence patterns so the content reads as smoothly as it is organised.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are developed with specific, relevant details, and the enthusiastic informal tone suits a letter to a friend.
Make the invitation more concrete by suggesting a particular weekend or date for the visit.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear sequence from the move and its reason to the apartment description and invitation.
Group these three stages into separate paragraphs and trim repetitive closing sentences for a cleaner progression.
Lexical Resource
The writer shows a good range of topic-specific vocabulary, but several collocations sound awkward or overly formal for a friend.
Use more natural phrases such as 'moved to a new apartment,' 'overlooking a park,' and 'relive our good memories.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response includes varied sentence structures, but errors with articles, clause patterns, possessives, and noun phrases recur.
Review article use and clause construction, especially 'As you already know,' 'for the whole day,' and 'It's well connected.'
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter:
- Explain why you have moved
- Describe the new apartment
- Invite him to pay a visit.
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