You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter: - Explain why you have moved - Describe the new apartment - Invite him to pay a visit.
Sample Response
Dear Baljeet, I'm very excitedWith all my excitement, I would like to tell you that I have moved to a new apartmentshifted to a new accommodation in Saket. I moved here last weekend during the auspicious festival of Navratraduring auspicious time of Navratra. The reason for the changereason for change was the long commute from my previous hometravelling hours from my last accommodation to my office. As you already know,As you already know that I recently started working in Delhichanged my work location to Delhi and the long commute left me tired for the whole daythe long travelling hours would leave me tired for whole day. With this moveWith this new change I am saving almost two hours each day2 hours daily. My new paradise is a two-bedroom apartmenta 2 bedroom apartment overlooking a parkfacing park. Its well-connected by metro and has a Select city walk mall just 2 km away. The place is well furnished and has excellent ventilationreally good ventilation, something I always look forlook out for. I would like you to plan to visit my new place somedayplan a visit someday to my new place. We can also plan a pajama party to relive our fond memoriesrevisit our old good memories. Hope to see you soon. Waiting eagerly for your visit. Bhawna Sharma
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter fully covers the reason for moving, describes the new apartment with relevant detail, and extends a warm invitation in a friendly, engaging tone. Its main weakness is recurring awkward phrasing and article or clause errors, which occasionally make the language sound less natural despite clear meaning. Focus first on more idiomatic collocations and accurate sentence patterns so the content reads as smoothly as it is organised.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are developed with specific, relevant details, and the enthusiastic informal tone suits a letter to a friend.
Make the invitation more concrete by suggesting a particular weekend or date for the visit.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear sequence from the move and its reason to the apartment description and invitation.
Group these three stages into separate paragraphs and trim repetitive closing sentences for a cleaner progression.
Lexical Resource
The writer shows a good range of topic-specific vocabulary, but several collocations sound awkward or overly formal for a friend.
Use more natural phrases such as 'moved to a new apartment,' 'overlooking a park,' and 'relive our good memories.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response includes varied sentence structures, but errors with articles, clause patterns, possessives, and noun phrases recur.
Review article use and clause construction, especially 'As you already know,' 'for the whole day,' and 'It's well connected.'
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter:
- Explain why you have moved
- Describe the new apartment
- Invite him to pay a visit.
Your response
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