You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter: - Explain why you have moved - Describe the new apartment - Invite him to pay a visit
Sample Response
Dear Anthony, It is with great pleasure that I'm writing to you today since it's almost two months since we last saw each other, I really miss all the quality time we spent together during summer last year.I am writing this letter to inform you that I have recently moved out of my old apartment to a new one. The major reason why I had to move out of my old apartment is because of the security problems in the area.As you can really the panic mode we both experienced because of the constant gunshot sound we heard everyday during late night on your last visit and also the lack of basic amenities like electricity, constant water and good road channel also played it's part on why I had to move out of my old apartment into a new one. And also I believe you're going to love my new apartment as it is a new fully furnished four bedroom detached duplex along Ajah road with a massive kitchen downstairs and a very large living room.It also have carpark,a beautiful dark green painting and also a fancy gate and a large compund for children's playground. I will be very happy if you and the children can come for a visit this coming Christmas,I have missed them alot and here is my new address Num.7 John street,along Ajah road incase you decide to show up with your children. All the best, John
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add article Original: during summer last year Suggested revision: during the summer last year Why it matters: Use the definite article when referring to a specific summer.
- 2. Fix movement phrase Original: moved out of my old apartment to a new one Suggested revision: moved from my old apartment to a new one Why it matters: The paired prepositions 'from' and 'to' express the move correctly.
- 3. Fix reason structure Original: The major reason why I had to move out of my old apartment is because of Suggested revision: The main reason I moved out of my old apartment was Why it matters: This removes the redundant and ungrammatical 'reason why ... is because' structure.
- 4. Remove redundant linker Original: And also I Suggested revision: I Why it matters: Starting with both 'And' and 'also' creates unnecessary repetition.
- 5. Punctuate modifiers Original: new fully furnished four bedroom detached duplex Suggested revision: new, fully furnished, four-bedroom detached duplex Why it matters: Commas and a hyphen make the sequence of modifiers clear.
- 6. Fix agreement and noun Original: It also have carpark Suggested revision: It also has a car park Why it matters: The singular subject requires 'has', and the countable feature needs an article.
- 7. Name the feature clearly Original: a beautiful dark green painting Suggested revision: beautiful dark green paintwork Why it matters: 'Paintwork' clearly describes the apartment's painted finish rather than a picture.
- 8. Correct spelling Original: compund Suggested revision: compound Why it matters: Correct this misspelling of 'compound'.
- 9. Fix noun phrase Original: for children's playground Suggested revision: for the children to use as a playground Why it matters: The revised phrase clearly expresses how the compound can be used.
- 10. Separate run-on clauses Original: Christmas,I Suggested revision: Christmas. I Why it matters: These independent clauses require a full stop rather than a comma.
- 11. Use natural expression Original: alot Suggested revision: very much Why it matters: 'Very much' is a correct expression after the verb 'missed'.
- 12. Use address abbreviation Original: Num.7 Suggested revision: No. 7 Why it matters: 'No.' is the standard abbreviation for a building number in an address.
Suggested Rewrites
- during summer last year during the summer last year
- moved out of my old apartment to a new one moved from my old apartment to a new one
- The major reason why I had to move out of my old apartment is because of The main reason I moved out of my old apartment was
- And also I I
- new fully furnished four bedroom detached duplex new, fully furnished, four-bedroom detached duplex
- It also have carpark It also has a car park
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers all three points with specific details and maintains a warm, friendly relationship with the recipient. Its main limitation is frequent loss of control in long sentences, where missing punctuation, grammar errors, and awkward wording sometimes make the message difficult to follow. Prioritise dividing the letter into short, purposeful paragraphs and sentences, then check agreement, possessives, articles, and spelling before submitting.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are addressed with relevant reasons, a detailed description of the new home, and a clear personal invitation.
Keep the friendly detail while making the opening more concise so the purpose emerges immediately.
Coherence and Cohesion
The content follows the requested order, but run-on sentences, absent paragraphing, and repetitive linking weaken progression and readability.
Create separate paragraphs for the reason, description, and invitation, and connect shorter sentences with varied cohesive devices.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range, including some specific housing and neighbourhood vocabulary, but spelling and collocation errors recur.
Check forms and collocations such as everyday versus every day, a lot, in case, car park, and constant water supply.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, possessives, articles, and clause construction reduce control.
Write shorter complete sentences and systematically check subject-verb agreement, apostrophes, and punctuation before combining ideas.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter:
- Explain why you have moved
- Describe the new apartment
- Invite him to pay a visit
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