The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
Sample Response
The provided plans present how the Southwest Airport looks now, and what it will look like next year, after the renovation work.
Generally speaking, the airport will be developed, expanded and improved to provide more entry and departure terminals, and more gates, and would include new facilities for the departing and arriving passengers at the airport.
As the maps suggest, the airport now has eight gates, and two entry and departure points. The passengers use a moving walkway to get to their boarding gate areas. After the renovation of the airport, it will have a bigger concourse area with eighteen gates to serve more passengers at a time. Moreover, the walkway will be replaced by a sky train to offer faster movement for passengers.
The departure area is on the left, and the arrival is on the right of the airport. Upon departing, security and passport control can be seen straight ahead. Shops will be built in areas where people will access before going to passport control and security. A bag-drop facility will also be included in the departure hall, and the check-in counters will be relocated to make the new bag-drop area bigger. Moreover, the café will be closer to the passport control area, and the arrival hall, which has no amenities now, will have a cafe, ATMs and car hire facilities.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Streamline map introduction Original: looks now, and what it will look like next year, after the renovation work Suggested revision: looks now and how it will look after redevelopment next year Why it matters: The replacement states the comparison more concisely and matches the task wording.
- 2. Avoid vague repetition Original: developed, expanded and improved Suggested revision: expanded and equipped with new facilities Why it matters: The revision replaces three overlapping verbs with a more specific summary of the plan.
- 3. Name access changes accurately Original: entry and departure terminals Suggested revision: entrances and exits Why it matters: The plan shows additional access points rather than separate new terminals.
- 4. Remove repeated conjunction Original: and more gates, and Suggested revision: more gates and Why it matters: A single conjunction links the final two items more smoothly.
- 5. Keep future tense consistent Original: would include Suggested revision: will include Why it matters: The confirmed future plan requires will rather than the conditional would.
- 6. Delete redundant phrase Original: at the airport Suggested revision: Delete Why it matters: The location is already clear from the subject of the sentence.
- 7. Describe current layout Original: two entry and departure points Suggested revision: separate departures and arrivals areas Why it matters: The current plan distinguishes departures and arrivals rather than showing two types of terminal.
- 8. Use generic plural Original: The passengers Suggested revision: Passengers Why it matters: No article is needed when referring to passengers in general.
- 9. Avoid unsupported inference Original: offer faster movement for passengers Suggested revision: transport passengers through the concourse Why it matters: The plan shows a sky train but does not provide evidence about its speed.
- 10. Name arrivals area Original: arrival is Suggested revision: arrivals area is Why it matters: The noun arrival does not by itself identify the airport section shown on the plan.
- 11. Describe fixed location Original: can be seen straight ahead Suggested revision: are located straight ahead Why it matters: Located is more precise than can be seen when describing a plan.
- 12. Correct shop location Original: before going to passport control and security Suggested revision: after passing through security and passport control Why it matters: The redeveloped plan places the shops beyond the departures control area.
Suggested Rewrites
- looks now, and what it will look like next year, after the renovation work looks now and how it will look after redevelopment next year
- developed, expanded and improved expanded and equipped with new facilities
- entry and departure terminals entrances and exits
- and more gates, and more gates and
- would include will include
- at the airport Delete
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview of the airport's expansion and covers most major changes, including the enlarged concourse, additional gates, sky train, bag drop, and new arrival facilities. However, a few spatial descriptions are inaccurate or imprecise, especially the location of the shops and the claim about more terminals. Improve by checking each facility's position carefully and distinguishing entrances, halls, and passenger-processing areas precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
The report selects most major redevelopment features and gives a clear overview, but a few descriptions of facilities and their locations are inaccurate.
Place the shops after security and passport control and describe the added entrances rather than claiming that new terminals will be built.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised into purposeful paragraphs and moves clearly from the overall transformation to concourse and terminal details.
Make the final paragraph even easier to follow by grouping all departure changes before moving to arrival facilities.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise for describing plans, although phrases such as 'entry and departure terminals' and 'areas where people will access' are awkward.
Use exact spatial terms such as 'entrances,' 'departure hall,' 'airside shops,' and 'arrival facilities.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The report uses varied complex structures with generally good control, though there are occasional article, agreement, and modal-consistency errors.
Keep future descriptions consistently in 'will' forms and check noun phrasing such as 'the departures area' and 'the arrivals area.'
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