The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Sample Response
The map illustrates the changes on an island after the construction of some tourist facilities. Generally speaking, the island was deserted as no tourists facility was there, but after the renovation, tourist amenities like the pier, restaurant, several accommodations, reception on the island, roads etc. made it tourists friendly. The first map shows nothing on the island except some trees but the second map illustrates the changes after the construction of facilities. A pier for the boats to land could be seen and from there, a vehicle track leads to the reception area and then the restaurant. Vehicle track ends near the restaurant and the footpath leads tourists to the accommodation areas and to the beach. Residential areas are located on both sides of the reception with footpath connecting them. It is worth noticing that no woodcutting took place as trees are present in both maps. On the left side of the reception, the residential area is connected to the beach via the footpath. Swimming facility is available there as well. To summarise, the map summarises that a deserted island had been turned into a tourist spot for the recreation and amusement of people without destroying natural beauty.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use plural subject Original: The map Suggested revision: The maps Why it matters: The task contains two maps, so the opening subject should be plural.
- 2. Fix noun phrase Original: no tourists facility Suggested revision: no tourist facilities Why it matters: Use the singular modifier "tourist" and the plural count noun "facilities."
- 3. Use precise process Original: renovation Suggested revision: development Why it matters: The maps show new construction rather than renovation of existing buildings.
- 4. Name the units Original: several accommodations Suggested revision: several accommodation units Why it matters: "Accommodation units" precisely identifies the individual huts shown.
- 5. Name the building Original: reception on the island Suggested revision: a reception building Why it matters: This concise phrase identifies the mapped structure without a vague location phrase.
- 6. Match map labels Original: roads etc. Suggested revision: vehicle tracks and footpaths Why it matters: The legend identifies vehicle tracks and footpaths, not generic roads.
- 7. Fix compound adjective Original: tourists friendly Suggested revision: tourist-friendly Why it matters: The compound adjective takes singular "tourist" and a hyphen.
- 8. Include the beach Original: nothing on the island except some trees Suggested revision: only a beach and some trees Why it matters: The original map also clearly shows a beach on the western side.
- 9. Use natural wording Original: for the boats to land Suggested revision: where boats can dock Why it matters: Boats dock at a pier rather than land on it.
- 10. Add the article Original: vehicle track Suggested revision: The vehicle track Why it matters: The specific track already shown on the map requires the definite article.
- 11. Clarify footpath use Original: leads tourists Suggested revision: allows tourists to walk Why it matters: This phrasing describes how tourists use the footpath more naturally.
- 12. Use map terminology Original: Residential areas Suggested revision: Accommodation areas Why it matters: The huts are tourist accommodation rather than permanent residential areas.
Suggested Rewrites
- The map The maps
- no tourists facility no tourist facilities
- renovation development
- several accommodations several accommodation units
- reception on the island a reception building
- roads etc. vehicle tracks and footpaths
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report gives a clear overview and covers almost every major addition, including the pier, transport links, reception, restaurant, accommodation clusters and swimming beach. Its strongest feature is comprehensive spatial coverage, but recurring article, number and word-form errors weaken precision and the single-block presentation obscures structure; prioritise dividing the description into overview and detail paragraphs while correcting forms such as tourist facilities, tourist-friendly and a vehicle track.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
The response presents a clear transformation overview and accurately describes nearly all major facilities, routes and preserved natural features.
Make the spatial account even more precise by distinguishing the two accommodation clusters and avoiding unsupported wording such as no woodcutting took place.
Coherence and Cohesion
The description progresses logically from the overall change to transport, buildings and the beach, but the entire report forms one undivided paragraph.
Use separate paragraphs for the introduction and overview, western facilities, and central and eastern development.
Lexical Resource
A good range of map vocabulary conveys the changes clearly, though several collocations and forms such as tourists facility and accommodations are awkward.
Use precise forms and collocations such as tourist facilities, accommodation units, tourist-friendly and vehicle track.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures, but errors with articles, plurals, possessives and noun modifiers recur throughout.
Proofread noun phrases systematically, especially a tourist facility, tourist-friendly, a vehicle track and footpaths connecting the units.
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