The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students.
Sample Response
The given flowchart presents the steps required to complete the requirements for work experience of the university students. As is presented in the flowchart, there are six steps involved in fulfilling the requirements starting from the Application submission till submitting the final report and after a student successfully complete these steps, s/he would be awarded the necessary credits. As is presented in the flowchart, the first step of the process is called ‘Application’ that requires a student to choose a suitable and potential workspace and to arrange the interview to submit the application in the fields s/he is interested in. The next step involves the approval stage where a student needs to be accepted and then s/he needs to submit the acceptance letter to a professor for approval. After that, the student is required to make a schedule to work for more than 10 hours per week for more than 20 weeks. In the fourth stage, the candidate has to fulfil the weekly work report and submit to the corresponding professor each Friday. In the Evaluation step, the candidate will participate in the evaluation meeting in the final week of his/ her work with the work supervisor and the supervisor would submit the evaluation form. In the final step, known as ‘Final Report’, the candidate has to submit the final report before the last week of spring semester. And with the submission of final report, the work experience requirements are fulfilled according to the process described in the flowchart.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Avoid repetition Original: the steps required to complete the requirements for work experience of the university students Suggested revision: the steps university students must follow to fulfil their work-experience requirement Why it matters: This revision removes repetition and expresses the purpose more naturally.
- 2. Remove repeated signpost Original: As is presented in the flowchart, the first step Suggested revision: The first step Why it matters: The repeated reference to the flowchart is unnecessary and delays the stage description.
- 3. Match the diagram Original: a suitable and potential workspace Suggested revision: potential workplaces from an approved list Why it matters: The diagram specifies multiple workplaces selected from an approved list, not one workspace.
- 4. Use plural form Original: arrange the interview Suggested revision: arrange interviews Why it matters: The diagram refers to interviews associated with the multiple potential workplaces.
- 5. Correct application detail Original: submit the application in the fields s/he is interested in Suggested revision: submit applications to places of interest Why it matters: The diagram requires applications to places of interest rather than applications in fields.
- 6. State approval accurately Original: where a student needs to be accepted Suggested revision: when the student receives an acceptance letter Why it matters: The approval stage begins when an acceptance letter is received.
- 7. Use natural collocation Original: make a schedule Suggested revision: arrange a schedule Why it matters: Arrange a schedule is the more natural collocation for planning work hours.
- 8. Correct minimum hours Original: more than 10 hours per week Suggested revision: a minimum of 10 hours per week Why it matters: The visual states a minimum of 10 hours per week, so exactly 10 hours is allowed.
- 9. Keep reference consistent Original: In the fourth stage, the candidate Suggested revision: In the fourth stage, the student Why it matters: Student is the accurate and consistent term for the person completing the process.
- 10. Correct report phrase Original: fulfil the weekly work report Suggested revision: complete the weekly Report Form Why it matters: A form is completed, not fulfilled, and the visual names it the weekly Report Form.
- 11. Add missing object Original: submit to the corresponding professor Suggested revision: submit it to the professor Why it matters: The verb submit needs an object here, referring to the completed form.
- 12. Use natural stage phrase Original: In the Evaluation step Suggested revision: At the evaluation stage Why it matters: This is a more natural way to introduce a named stage in a process.
Suggested Rewrites
- the steps required to complete the requirements for work experience of the university students the steps university students must follow to fulfil their work-experience requirement
- As is presented in the flowchart, the first step The first step
- a suitable and potential workspace potential workplaces from an approved list
- arrange the interview arrange interviews
- submit the application in the fields s/he is interested in submit applications to places of interest
- where a student needs to be accepted when the student receives an acceptance letter
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response's strongest feature is its complete, logically ordered account of all six stages, supported by a clear overview of the process and its outcome. Its main limitation is imprecise language, including a factual change from a minimum of 10 hours over 20 weeks to more than both figures, alongside recurring grammatical and collocational errors. The priority is to preserve the diagram's exact conditions while using more natural, accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The response identifies all six stages, provides a clear overview, and accurately reports most key requirements, but it misstates the schedule as more than 10 hours per week for more than 20 weeks.
Reproduce quantitative conditions precisely, distinguishing a minimum of 10 hours per week over 20 weeks from amounts above those thresholds.
Coherence and Cohesion
The stages progress logically and are clearly signposted, although repetitive framing and the absence of paragraph breaks make the organisation less polished.
Group the overview and process details into purposeful paragraphs and vary stage transitions instead of repeating similar introductory phrases.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for describing a process, but awkward choices such as 'potential workspace,' 'fulfil the weekly work report,' and 'corresponding professor' reduce precision.
Use natural process collocations such as 'approved workplaces,' 'complete a weekly report form,' and 'submit it to the professor.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the process clearly, but recurring agreement, article, preposition, and sentence-control errors limit accuracy.
Proofread complex sentences for subject-verb agreement and complete clause structure, especially forms such as 'a student successfully completes' and 'submit it to a professor.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students.
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