Do you think that school newspaper should be given the absolute free speech with no censorship from faculty advisors? You should
Sample Response
Censorship of school newspapers invites controversies across the world in this modern era. Though many people voice the opinion against the faculty editing in student newsletters, my two cents is teachers’ censorship of school newspaper is a healthy practice.
One of the obvious reasons is that student's opinions are amateur, on many occasions, and it might convey the wrong message to other students. To be more precise, school pupils are vulnerable to what they see and hear. If an inappropriate message is conveyed to them, that will cause serious consequences among them. Furthermore, if students get these wrong or biased messages regularly the whole society will be affected drastically as they are going to drive the society in the future. So, a matured faculty monitoring the content and authenticity of school newspapers would be a far better alternative. Apart from that, the faculty advisors can help to hit the nail on the head about any controversial issues and which will bear better fruit. The recent court order in the United States regarding a school newspaper issue crystal cleared that faculty supervision in student newsletter articles is the best epitome.
Another reason to support my opinion is that the school newspaper under the scanner of a faculty brings about the substantial reduction of legal issues. In other words, many student opinions, such as about alcoholism and teenage pregnancy are against the national law and order and that may cause communal unrests. A teacher's opinion before publishing those opinions immensely help to avoid potential legal problems. Needless to say, student's opinions about any issues get huge public attention if it is published without wild and woolly. Teachers headed editorial body rose lots of valuable opinions through the students' magazine without harming legal system of the country among Japanese schools are best examples. Newspapers and magazines in school need teacher’s supervision not only to avoid controversy but also to improve the overall quality of the content.
However, an army of the people claims that the faculty involvement in students’ creativity is unethical. Perhaps it may true to some extent but while viewed in a large picture it is related to students’ safety and learning, clip the wing is justifiable.
Put it in a nutshell, faculty involvement in school magazine helps to channel students’ talent in a healthy way. Necessary censorship brings about to blow many issues and put forward excellent solutions to combat many social problems in a healthy manner. On top of that, an experienced helping hand supports the students to pump new ideas to society without breaching the laws.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Natural collocation Original: invites controversies Suggested revision: causes controversy Why it matters: Controversy is normally uncountable here.
- 2. Unclear phrase Original: voice the opinion against the faculty editing Suggested revision: oppose faculty editing Why it matters: The direct verb is clearer.
- 3. Informal idiom Original: my two cents is Suggested revision: I believe that Why it matters: Use an academic statement of position.
- 4. Plural possessive Original: student's Suggested revision: students' opinions Why it matters: The opinions belong to multiple students.
- 5. Wrong adjective use Original: opinions are amateur Suggested revision: opinions may be poorly informed Why it matters: People can be amateurs; opinions are not amateur.
- 6. Wrong preposition Original: cause serious consequences among them Suggested revision: have serious consequences for them Why it matters: Consequences are for people.
- 7. Wrong adjective Original: a matured faculty Suggested revision: experienced faculty members Why it matters: Matured is not natural for professional expertise.
- 8. Avoid idiom Original: hit the nail on the head Suggested revision: address Why it matters: The idiom is informal and vague.
- 9. Broken relative clause Original: and which will bear better fruit Suggested revision: and improve the final publication Why it matters: The original relative clause has no clear antecedent.
- 10. Wrong verb phrase Original: crystal cleared Suggested revision: demonstrated clearly Why it matters: Crystal clear is an adjective, not this verb form.
- 11. Wrong noun Original: best epitome Suggested revision: best approach Why it matters: Epitome does not mean an effective policy.
- 12. Unnatural metaphor Original: under the scanner of a faculty Suggested revision: reviewed by a faculty adviser Why it matters: Use literal editorial language.
Suggested Rewrites
- invites controversies causes controversy
- voice the opinion against the faculty editing oppose faculty editing
- my two cents is I believe that
- student's students' opinions
- opinions are amateur opinions may be poorly informed
- cause serious consequences among them have serious consequences for them
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay gives a clear position in favour of faculty oversight and develops relevant concerns about harmful content, legal risk, and editorial quality. However, many examples are unclear or unsupported, the opposing view is treated only briefly, and pervasive idiom misuse and grammatical errors often obscure meaning; prioritise precise, evidence-based reasoning and controlled academic language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
A consistent position and several relevant reasons are present, but development is sometimes implausible, unclear or insufficiently balanced.
Use two well-explained risks of uncensored publication and seriously address the strongest free-speech counterargument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and overall progression are visible, though long sentences and poorly chosen links disrupt local coherence.
Give each paragraph one claim, explanation and credible example, then connect the counterargument directly to the rebuttal.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a wide range, but frequent idiom and collocation errors substantially reduce precision.
Replace figurative clichés with literal academic terms such as 'editorial oversight', 'legal liability' and 'student expression'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are frequent, but agreement, articles, possessives and clause construction errors regularly impede clarity.
Write shorter sentences and verify the subject and finite verb in every clause.