Do you think that school newspaper should be given the absolute free speech with no censorship from faculty advisors? You should

Sample Response

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Censorship of school newspapers causes controversyinvites controversies across the world in this modern era. Though many people oppose faculty editingvoice the opinion against the faculty editing in student newsletters, I believe thatmy two cents is teachers’ censorship of school newspaper is a healthy practice.

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One of the obvious reasons is that students' opinionsstudent's opinions may be poorly informedopinions are amateur, on many occasions, and it might convey the wrong message to other students. To be more precise, school pupils are vulnerable to what they see and hear. If an inappropriate message is conveyed to them, that will have serious consequences for themcause serious consequences among them. Furthermore, if students get these wrong or biased messages regularly the whole society will be affected drastically as they are going to drive the society in the future. So, experienced faculty membersa matured faculty monitoring the content and authenticity of school newspapers would be a far better alternative. Apart from that, the faculty advisors can help to addresshit the nail on the head about any controversial issues and improve the final publicationand which will bear better fruit. The recent court order in the United States regarding a school newspaper issue demonstrated clearlycrystal cleared that faculty supervision in student newsletter articles is the best approachepitome.

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Another reason to support my opinion is that the school newspaper reviewed by a faculty adviserunder the scanner of a faculty brings about the substantial reduction of legal issues. In other words, many student opinions, such as about alcoholism and teenage pregnancy are against the national law and order and that may cause communal unrests. A teacher's opinion before publishing those review immensely helpsopinions immensely help to avoid potential legal problems. Needless to say, student's opinions about any issues get huge public attention if it is published without editorial reviewpublished without wild and woolly. Teachers headed editorial body rose lots of valuable opinions through the students' magazine without harming legal system of the country among Japanese schools are best examples. Newspapers and magazines in school need teacher’s supervision not only to avoid controversy but also to improve the overall quality of the content.

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However, an army of the people claims that the faculty involvement in students’ creativity is unethical. Perhaps it may be truePerhaps it may true to some extent but while viewed in a large picture it is related to students’ safety and learning, limited editorial intervention is justifiableclip the wing is justifiable.

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Put it in a nutshell, faculty involvement in school magazine helps to channel students’ talent in a healthy way. Necessary censorship brings important issues to lightbrings about to blow many issues and put forward excellent solutions to combat many social problems in a healthy manner. On top of that, an experienced helping hand supports the students to pump new ideas to society without breaching the laws.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The essay gives a clear position in favour of faculty oversight and develops relevant concerns about harmful content, legal risk, and editorial quality. However, many examples are unclear or unsupported, the opposing view is treated only briefly, and pervasive idiom misuse and grammatical errors often obscure meaning; prioritise precise, evidence-based reasoning and controlled academic language.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.0
Scoring rule

A consistent position and several relevant reasons are present, but development is sometimes implausible, unclear or insufficiently balanced.

Next step

Use two well-explained risks of uncensored publication and seriously address the strongest free-speech counterargument.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

Paragraphing and overall progression are visible, though long sentences and poorly chosen links disrupt local coherence.

Next step

Give each paragraph one claim, explanation and credible example, then connect the counterargument directly to the rebuttal.

LR

Lexical Resource

5.5
Scoring rule

The response attempts a wide range, but frequent idiom and collocation errors substantially reduce precision.

Next step

Replace figurative clichés with literal academic terms such as 'editorial oversight', 'legal liability' and 'student expression'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5
Scoring rule

Complex structures are frequent, but agreement, articles, possessives and clause construction errors regularly impede clarity.

Next step

Write shorter sentences and verify the subject and finite verb in every clause.

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