Larger proportions of people live and work in other countries today than at any time in the past. It is probable that in the future there will be no borders and people will be able to move freely between countries. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?
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Yes, it is true that a large percentage of people today live and work in other nations compared withto the past. However, it doesn’t imply that people would be able to move freely between nations in the future and countries will be borderless.
Even before consideringJust forget about the free movementcommute between nations, this is not even possibleit is even not possible within a country. Let us take the example of India. There are many youngsters who leave their native towns to work in majormetro cities to earn a good living for their familiesfamily. However, they are not readily accepted by local residentsaccepted by the city. The priority is always given to local residents who have knowledge of the local communityknowledge of local people, traditions, and what works well in a particular city.
OutsidersThe outsiders are considered only when there is a need. Regarding acceptanceWhen it comes to acceptance, let us get back to the time of financial crisis. At that time, the first people to lose their jobs were the people who came to work in the U.S. from other nations.
Many nationsThe various nations are implementing increasingly restrictiveeven more restrictive and stringent immigration policies. Such measures are being imposed at precisely the same time aswhen migration to other nations has become an increasingly vital part of people’s plans for accessing essential resourcesgetting access to life resources.
Before we even thinkBefore even we think of no borders, it is essential to addresseradicate the other problems related to immigration. The spousal visa holders, renewable working permits and other temporary visas that face several challenges are often suspended in future with people stuck in devastating consequences.
To conclude, due to the prevailing cultural and economic diversities, and safety issues, the borders will continue to exist in the future.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay maintains a clear disagreement with a borderless future and supports it through examples of local preference, employment insecurity, restrictive immigration policies, and visa difficulties. Its main limitation is development: several short paragraphs make assertions without fully explaining how they prove borders will remain, and the visa sentence is grammatically obscure. Build two sustained cause-and-effect arguments—political protection of residents and unresolved security or visa controls—and express each with precise, complete sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and several relevant barriers to free movement are identified, though some are only briefly asserted rather than fully developed.
Select two major barriers and explain step by step why governments' protection of residents and control of migration make border removal improbable.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical path from domestic mobility to employment, policy, and visa barriers, but several short paragraphs fragment closely related reasoning.
Combine the employment examples into one developed paragraph and the policy and visa points into another, using explicit causal links.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for migration and policy issues, but phrases such as "free commute between nations," "life resources," and "stuck in devastating consequences" are imprecise.
Prefer standard expressions such as "free movement," "economic opportunities," and "left in precarious circumstances."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex sentences generally convey the argument, although word order, tense, and clause-control errors remain noticeable.
Rewrite the visa sentence as two complete statements and use natural order in forms such as "Before we even consider removing borders."