Is it better for students to live at home with their parents or in school accommodation? Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea.
Sample Response
Nowadays, many parents believeparents thought to decide that their children should stay at home and go to school. In contrast, some other people arguethere are some other people argue that their children should be sent to the school dormitory. I personally agree with the second group'sagree the second group’s point of view. There are many advantages that the teenagers will get when they live in the school accommodation, namely they will have new friends, more time to study and discuss ideasstudy and discussion and learn to liveit learn to live independently and take responsibilities.
Firstly, if the students live in school accommodation, they will have many different friends from different regionsfriends such as different regions, languages, customs, hobbies, background and current fields of study. Some scholars saySome scholar said living in a diverse communityliving in the diversity helps the community think uniquely. I mean, they will have a better understanding than people who never build relationshipsbuild up the relationship with others in the community or even in the school. These students will also expand their knowledge because they are able to learn from others.
Furthermore, group discussion is one of the important things that should be done by the students. In this group, they could meet their classmates or others having the same interest. More time can be usedMore time is using to discuss the assignments or essays will improve the abilityimpact to the ability and capability of the students. Group study is verymuch useful because intellectually and behaviorally these students will change positively.
Lastly, the decision to stay at school dormitory means more independence to do everything such as cooking, washing, tidying up the bedroom, cleaning shared areasclearing the building, yard, etc. These kinds of activities will lead the students to be independent and responsible.
To sum up, even though many people have different arguments about where is the best place for their sons and daughtersdaughter: staying in school accommodation or living at home. My suggestion and reasons have been explained abovehave explained above. So I think the better place for the students is to live in the school dormitory.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response gives a consistent preference for school accommodation and develops three relevant benefits: diverse friendships, collaborative study, and independence. However, the required supporting experience or concrete example is missing, several ideas are asserted generally, and grammar and collocation errors occur so frequently that precision is reduced. Add one specific illustrative example and prioritise basic sentence construction, agreement, verb forms, and natural academic phrases.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The opinion is clear and relevant reasons are developed, but no personal experience or concrete example is supplied.
Add a specific example showing how dormitory life improved study habits or independence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has clear paragraph progression, though some links are mechanical and conclusions are fragmentary.
Use one clear topic sentence and one developed illustration per body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary covers the topic, but frequent misuse and awkward collocation limit flexibility.
Use live in a dormitory, discuss assignments, improve ability, and develop responsibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in tense, clause structure, agreement, articles, and passives sometimes strain reading.
Build accurate simple sentences before combining clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Is it better for students to live at home with their parents or in school accommodation? Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea.
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