Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.
Sample Response
It seems like the world is becoming smaller and smaller almost by the minuteminutes. When I was a child I could not imagine meetingimagine to meet someone from another part of the planet. However, now I have a few friends from Africa, I can meet many Chinese people on the streets, have dinner at a Mexican restaurant, buy some delicious cookies at a cafe run by the French. It is really wonderful and amazing to see people from all over the world and to communicate and work with themto see people from all over the world, communicate and work with them. I agree with those people who move a number of times throughout their lives. However, I believe that people who spend their entire lives in one place have many advantages too. First of all, I will focus on the reasons why I support the idea of moving and then I will move on to analysing the opportunities that people have when staying in one placepeople have staying at one place. Personally, I think that the first and most obvious reason to move from one place to another is to see the world. Of coursecause, this can be obtained by travelling. Nevertheless, travelling does not provide an opportunitydoes not give the opportunity to immerse oneself in traditionsimmerse into traditions, customs and just the way of life of the country. It is like seeing beautiful looking boots on a show-window and does not try them on to see if they are comfortable. The second reason for moving is the opportunity to gain new experiencesexperience and knowledge. One can meet new people and make new friendsmeet new people and new friends, extend one's range of interests. Also, one can find a better job, livinglife conditions and even climate. For example, my husband likeslike the warm and sunny weather. So his dream is to live here in Texas half the yeara half of the year and move to Australia for another half of the year to catch warm months. One more example, my aunt does not feel good in sultry and humid weather. So she had to move several times to find a place where she feels comfortable. On the other handFrom the other side, this way of life has some disadvantages. For instance, it is difficult to build a successful careermake a good career if one is constantly moving. Of cause, this does not apply to celebrities while they are on tourit does not concern celebrities on their tours. Also, it is not good for children because they will have to change their schools a few times. Staying in one place has plenty of advantagesa plenty of advantages too. I must confess that I am closer to the people who do not move much. I prefer to have a permanent home with my old and favourite things, have a dog and a beautiful view from the window. In conclusion, I think that every person is always looking for something better than he already has. So, if people live in one place through their entire lives it means that they are looking for something else.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response's strongest feature is its use of relevant personal examples to explain the attractions and drawbacks of moving. Its main limitation is an inconsistent position: it initially supports moving, later identifies more closely with staying, and ends without clearly resolving that choice. The highest-priority improvement is to state one qualified preference, sustain it throughout clearly separated paragraphs, and make the conclusion directly confirm it.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both lifestyles and supplies relevant examples, but its preference changes and the final conclusion does not answer the choice directly.
State a consistent preference in the introduction and make every main point and the conclusion clearly support that position.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas generally progress through the advantages and disadvantages of moving before considering stability, although the single-block presentation and mechanical signposting weaken organisation.
Divide the response into purposeful paragraphs and use transitions to show relationships between ideas instead of announcing each stage.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate and sometimes specific, but recurring spelling and collocation errors such as "Of cause" and "life conditions" reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate collocations and proofread recurring word-choice and spelling errors, using forms such as "of course" and "living conditions".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the ideas clearly, but agreement, article, infinitive, and sentence-boundary errors recur.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.
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